Writing The Traveler

HolyMackerel

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So, this is the fiction I have been working on for a while. I hope you guys like it, and feel free to give critique.

Special thanks to DNA, who helped me a lot with fixing up this chapter(and probably the future others.

Oh an yes. I will be taking advantage of spoiler tags.


Chapters:

Nice to Meet You(below)
How Are You Doing?
Not So Good


I wake up to see the usual things. The two beds, night stand, and green walls. In ways, it relieves me, in others, it makes me sad. I turned to the side and pull off my blankets as I grab my glasses. I look around to see that my roommate, Margaret, is still asleep. That figures. Margaret was the kind of student who didn’t just go to parties for celebration, or even just once a week. Margaret goes to parties every night. It’s a wonder that she hasn’t dropped out of college yet. I pick myself out of bed and grab a towel.

After washing up, my day is all planned out. I’ll get some breakfast, have some classes, head for lunch, and then I’ll be home free.

I grab my foldable bike, which first looks like a jumble of parts, but comes together like an elastic puzzle. I made it with some help from my Robotics teacher. Yah, it’s no driver’s license, but I can handle it. I never got around to learning how to drive. Not having a mom or dad kind of takes that out of the equation.

Once I get outside I ride to the local breakfast place, and have a quick meal including strawberries, biscuits, and sausage. I wolf it down then take a quick sip of orange juice. By the time I finish breakfast and ride to the university, it’s roughly seven o’clock. That means I still have forty minutes to spare until I would have to head for class. I don’t know why I rush so much in the mornings. I guess I get eager for free time.

I walk to the park nearby and sit on the bench. The park is like a little castle. It has two towers, with stairs leading to the top of each, and a slide on both on them. Between the two towers, there are ways to get across: monkey bars and a tunnel. The tunnel is hung in the air, and make of plastic. I guess kids can crawl through it to get to one tower or the other. Around each tower on the ground is a moat, filled with sand and toy crocodiles. There were also some swings on the side of the left tower.

Only a father and his son were at the playground. The boy appeared to be five years old, and the dad looked to be in his early twenties. Maybe he isn’t his dad. Maybe it’s a babysitter or something.

I bring out my book and begin to read. I stop a few times to watch the dad/babysitter push the boy on the swings, hold him while the boy was testing the monkey bars, and sometimes tickle him on the ground. Yes, the dad/babysitter is cute, but I am definitely too shy to make a move to talk to him.

After some time I hear crying. I looked up to see the little boy was stuck on top of the plastic tunnel, and the dad/babysitter was trying to get him down, but every time he got on to reach the boy, the tunnel sunk dangerously low. I guess they built the playground for only small kids. I look down at myself and see my petite stature. I am still very light, despite my age and diet. I walk up to the tower and ask the babysitter if it's okay if I can pick the boy up and bring him down. He quickly nods and explains to the boy that I am going to help him get down.

I climb to the tunnel, sitting on top, and test it to see if it sinks as I move. It didn’t. I’m not sure what causes children to get on the top of tunnels instead of inside them. These heights are scary.

I cautiously crawl to the boy, and pick him up and put him behind me. Now that we are positioned back-to-back, I scoot backwards until he reaches the end of the tunnel and reaches the babysitter’s arms. Then I drop myself to the platform and stand beside the two.

“Thank you!” the dad/babysitter exclaims, holding out his hand. I shake it.

“No problem, just helping out,” I nervously reply. This was the bad side of helping out. Meeting new people wasn’t exactly my favorite activity.

“My name is Leo, and that was a close one, thanks.” He grins at the kid as he set him to the floor. The kid runs off and begins to play in the sandbox.

“My name’s Emily.”I continued. He didn’t say anything, so I kept talking “So…babysitting isn’t all it’s made out to be, right?” I could slap myself for attempting to continue the conversation.

He looks confused for a second, then shakes his head and smiles. “No, this is my little brother, Stanley.”

I laugh nervously and say “Oh! Well…see yah later!” I run away before the conversation can continue.

Gosh! Why do I have to be so anti-social?! I thought. I walked into the university, even though I still had ten minutes before I really needed to walk to class. Soon I realized that I forgot my book at the playground. I figured that it was better to leave it there than to run into Leo again and try to make conversation. Maybe it would be there later. I played with my phone for a bit, sitting outside of the classroom, before Ms. Delitrott walked to the door and unlocked it.

“You always come so early, Emily. Why?” She asks.

“Well, I don’t really have much else to do beyond going to school.” I nervously mumble, scratching the back of my head.

“Job?” she implies.

“Online,” I simply respond, trying to end the conversation with short answers.

“Wow, very nice.” She raises an eyebrow and blows the hair out of her face. I think Ms. Delitrott is the youngest teacher I ever had. She is very smart, and skipped several grades. I like her because she always wore these weird outfits and made her class fun by using humor. Before I had her as a teacher, I hated math. Now, it’s different.

I walk in the room and sit at my desk. I look down to see the similar inscriptions on the desk from past students. Most of the inscriptions are either inappropriate or not legible enough to read.

Twenty minutes later, more students pile in. At eight o’clock, Ms. Delitrott closes the door and begins class.

The rest of the day seems to flow right by. It’s only the morning that really drags on. When I’m learning in school, it seems as though I can’t take in enough. I love college.

After my classes are over, I head outside and set up to ride. After noon, I have the day to myself. I love college schedules. I head for some takeout, and take it with me to downtown. I pull up to the subway station and input my card to get in. I leave my bike against the wall and walk down to Railway #327. I know it won’t get stolen.

No one else is waiting for the train to come. I am alone. After a few minutes of waiting, the train comes to a screeching halt and opens its doors. It’s empty inside, and I sit in a seat and begin eating my food. I finish quickly, eating lightly. I stand up to hold on to the handle, even though I have plenty of room to sit down.

The train heads into an unlit tunnel. I feel it. I feel the way my body twists form, and how the brick in the walls changes into modern metal. How the train has grown extra seats for smaller creatures. And how I look at my hand again and it’s a slightly different shade. The train exits the tunnel and stops. It opens the doors and I am welcomed to the new world.

I am a Traveler.



Thanks for reading, I hope you like it!
 
Please get rid of your spoiler tags, aggiegwyn. They're extremely unprofessional, and I hate having to click on spoilers just to read a story that is supposed to be visible to begin with.
 
Just use quote tags if you have to. I understand wanting to seperate the chapter from your own comments, but spoilers really aren't the way to go about it. All they do is hide passages of text until someone clicks on them, which a lot of people just find annoying when you're not doing some sort of teaser.

Edit: DNA discussed things with me and changed my viewpoint on Spoiler use. I'm sorry for being a burden, aggiegwyn, but I still recommend against them.
 
If I had a choice I wouldn't be the first to reply to this with a comment, but since no one else is paying attention, I might as well.

As I told you earlier I think the introduction is very good; although it doesn't really show very well where the story goes, it pulls a fast one at the end with something totally unexpected. I could almost describe this as "beauty in simplicity".

I wonder where the significance of all this will lead? As usual, I'll be waiting.
(Yes I know this comment is rather short, but I've already told you what my thoughts are on your fic already, so I'm not sure how much more I can add to that.)
 
Yah. I'm going to be home for Spring Break, with only my mom, so that means the computer is all to myself, therefor, writing shall be completed.

Thanks for the comment.

I'm feeling very betrayed right now. When it came to an autobiography that I spent ZERO effort on, I got tons of comments, now, nothing...
 
Thanks again to DNA! This story could not be as well done without him! Here's the next chapter.



How Are You Doing?

The doors open to an abandoned part of the station. I look around for a few seconds, gathering the information I can about this world. I have to switch my vocabulary, refreshing myself on the new names of objects in this world. Cell phones are PokeNavs. Animals are Pokemon. Hospitals are Pokemon Centers. Now that my review is over, I walk over to the exit gate that leads to the main station. Unlike the one on Earth, this station is completely packed. On Pokemon Earth there are very few cars, so the main modes of transportation are the bus or the train. Most people go for the train.

Rustboro City is pretty extravagant. They go really big with the buildings, and the city is filled with all sorts of weird companies. They have the PokeNav business, I think a few people who worked to invent the PokeDex were born here, and plenty of others here grew to be heroes of technology. I don’t know why, but every time I travel to Pokemon Earth, I end up here.

I head over to my home, the apartment complex, because I need to pick up a few things before I go to see Roxanne. I grin at the passing people and Pokemon as I walk down the smooth streets, and as soon as I see the bright blue building I know I’m home. I head inside and wait for the elevator to come down. The receptionist looks at me for a moment, but I quickly turn away. Yes, even on a different planet, I am still very anti-social. I sigh in my head as I get in the elevator and head up towards my floor. I rush in to open the doorway to my room, seeing the usual aquatic themed bedroom, and my things lying on the coral green carpet.

Inside, I need to do a few things. First, I need to take off the clothes from Earth, and change into a different outfit. Earthling clothes tend to look dull and a bit out of place in the bright colorful world of Pokemon. I put on the most contrasting colors I can find in my closet--neon orange and turquoise—and move on to equipment. I take out my phone and check to see if its transformation is successful. As expected, it had morphed into a PokeNav. Of course it was successful. The train always did its job. I pick up the Poké Balls from the apartment floor and set them in my belt. Bellossom, Blaziken, Gyarados, Dragonite, and Togekiss sit in the devices. I spent at least three years training these guys. Aside from Roxanne, they were the only ones I had enough courage to talk to on this planet.

I grab my bag, which is filled with all sorts of unusual devices, and head outside. Opposite to my morning on Earth, I was running late. Roxanne wanted for me to observe an upcoming gym battle. I guess I’m still need to learn life lessons from my old teacher.

It is illegal to use flying Pokemon on most city grounds, so I end up taking the subway. Of course, it's lunch time there, and the station is even more packed than usual. I have to wait for my train to pass three times before it has enough room for me, and even then it seems as though the train is dragging slowly; very, very, slowly.

Eventually, I do get to the Rustboro City Gym. I am seventeen minutes late as I run inside and enter the guest room. It’s located on the higher left side of the stadium, so that spectators can view battles in progress. I look through the clear wall as I set my bag down to see that Roxanne is battling. What a relief. I sit myself on the back side of the room, by the window. I admire the battle while getting out my water bottle.

The kid she is battling has no chance. He walks in with a Zigzagoon and a Wurmple. He is going to walk out with a knocked-out Zigzagoon and a knocked-out Wurmple. A few minutes later, my prediction comes true. Roxanne walks up the stairs and enters the observation room, letting down her hair and giving an exasperated look to me. Where there used to be fancy curves of hair on her head are crazy curls. She runs her fingers through the curls as she sits down to talk.

“The nerve of kids these days is incredible,” she groans. “I can guarantee you that kid is going to be in my class tomorrow, expecting me to teach him everything I know in a day.”

“Well, what are you going to do about kids, you know?” I sarcastically remark. Roxanne scans my teenage body, realizing the joke.

“Well, the battle you and I had years ago was quite entertaining,” she remarks as she takes off the professional-looking clip on her dress.

“Anyways, “Teacher”, what’s the lesson today?” I ask, smiling. Roxanne used to be my teacher years ago, and because of that I had to get used to talking to her. As the years passed, it became less and less of a fear to talk to her. In the meantime, we became friends. But, I have decided to make my travelling abilities a secret from her. From everyone.

“The lesson is A: Do not walk into any gym battle with untouched Pokemon...” - she pauses as she pulls the hair out of her face - “and B: Retire after beating a challenger in one minute and fifty-two seconds.”

I laugh at the joke and turn to her. Roxanne isn’t laughing. She’s dead serious. She looks at me, expecting some sort of response. I realize what she is expecting me to do. She wants me to take her place.

“Wait…what?” I exclaim, scooting to the edge of my seat. “I don’t even have a Rock-type Pokemon, Roxanne! I don’t have any social skills at all! I travel a lot. There is no way I could do this.”

“I’m retiring, Miku,” she states bluntly, using my Pokemon Earth name, “and you’re going to replace me. You can do this. You don’t have to talk to the person during the battle, and you know you could catch some rock Pokemon easily.” She uses her soothing voice to get me to calm down, but it doesn’t help my burning face, nor my ability to stop myself from crying.

“Why? You’re only like…thirty-two…right?” I exclaim, gripping my bag. “You can’t retire.” She can’t leave me here. She can’t leave me to be alone.

“Thirty-one, actually. I’m retiring because I am getting to be a very tough gym leader to beat.” She pauses, looking at the floor. “I’m being promoted to the Elite Four. I can’t stay here, Miku. You’re going to have to learn how to communicate, and don’t you dare say you can’t. Our friendship is living proof you can.” She was right; of course she was right. She was the teacher, I was the student. I have to learn how to communicate. But how well can I communicate before I have to give up my secret? Before I have to tell the whole universe that I can travel to different worlds at will?

I realize something. This could be a good thing. If Roxanne and I had been friends for much longer, maybe she would notice that I would go to the train station a lot. Maybe I would screw up one time and say “Game Boy” instead of “PokeDex”. Eventually she would find out, and I would have to explain it to her. Then, I may have to tell all of the worlds. That can’t happen. They would use me to plot invasions, to create wars, to trade weapons. I wouldn’t work.

“C-congratulations,” I say, standing up and strapping my bag on my shoulder. I say it coldly, meaning for it to hurt. I don’t want her to come back. I don’t want to have to tell her. Roxanne is moving away. The only person who I could talk to without stuttering in almost all of Pokemon Earth is leaving me. But this is a good thing. At least that’s what I’m telling myself as I run away from the building.

It’s a good thing… I think as I hear her calling me name. I think that as I reach the complex, and as I get in the elevator.

Thoughts swarm my head as I rise with the elevator. It stops three floors before mine, and in comes a teenage boy. Of course I didn’t think to hold my tears until I reached my room. I turn around, wiping them away, red from embarrassment. The boy doesn’t make any move closer, and I’m glad he doesn’t. I don’t want to talk. I don’t want to be talked to.

The elevator stops at my floor, and we both get out. I notice the pile of boxes by the door across from mine, and see the boy walk up to it and open the door. Great, he is just going to wait until I stop crying and then ask what’s wrong. I pretend to walk to my “room” that is down the hallway, and wait for him to go inside and shut the door. When he’s done, I walk back to my room. This way, he won’t knock on my door asking what went wrong.

I sit on the couch and try to read a magazine on the latest Pokemon devices, trying to find something else to think about. I wanted to go back to Earth, but I was afraid of running into the boy, or Roxanne. I will leave early tomorrow. I begin to cry as I think about Roxanne again, and when I’m done, I’m glad it’s out of my system. I sit on my bed and try to think about something else. Right before I go to sleep, I realize how familiar that boy looked.
 
I'm liking it so far. Would the traveling thing happen to be another Pendragon reference?
 
Shadow Arceus said:
I'm liking it so far. Would the traveling thing happen to be another Pendragon reference?

I suppose you can relate it to that, but I have always had an idea of a girl roaming around space since I had a dream when I was six years old...

Thank you!
 
Please don't bump fanfics over the two-week limit without asking the author first via PM or at least leaving a worthwhile critique. Aggiegwyn, just let me know when (or if) you want to update this and I'll unlock it.

*locked*

~Apollo
 
Sorry about the delay, just had to get axams done and over with. Again, I would like to thank DNA for awesome editing skills, and here we are, with a new chapter!

Not So Good.

Anger is an unfamiliar feeling within me. The thing about anger is that it almost always is associated with blame. Seeing as how I only really know one person in the universe, I don’t have very many people to blame for my problems. This morning, my anger isn’t pointed at Roxanne. It’s pointed at my power. Sometimes I wish that I could be normal, and have nothing to hide. But is it really a choice of mine? No, I don’t think so.

I try to cool it off. I travel to Earth and lay in my room. I read, use the computer, get some work done, and nothing happens. In fact, the anger grows, and soon I’m infuriated. I decide to resort to violence. I’m going to Keron.

Keron is a world completely based on military. The overall goal for the average Keronian is to become a member of the army, or part of a platoon, and to die a hero for their country. They're so obsessed with warfare that I wouldn’t dare to talk to anyone on this planet. They would immediately resort to using me as a weapon if they found my secret.

Even though they have a primitive, war-like nature, but they used advanced weapons to respond to it. It’s like if you grew up only knowing how to fight, so you would be a feisty person, but with great fighting skills. Keroronians are very advanced. In warfare, no world comes close. But in everyday items…it’s pretty much the same.


Keroronians are small, froglike creatures that walk on two legs. They come in a huge variety of different colors - red, blue, green, brown, any color, really. Adults have a big white spot on their stomachs, while children also have white on their faces and have white, tadpole-like tails. Every Keroronian is born with a birthmark on their stomach. When they get old enough to wear a cap, the cap is made to have a copy of that birthmark on it. It can be anything, really. Letters, signs, things…

All these facts float through my head as I step outside of the modern train, in my Keronian form, and enter an abandoned station. It’s covered in old military posters from years ago, with old generals encouraging other Keronians to win the wars they wage. I walk towards the wall and touch one of the posters, revealing my small, bright orange hand. I look down at my stomach to see my symbol, which was a bright red “T”. I suppose it could stand for my Keronian name, Takiki, but I think that the symbol really stands for Traveler. A smaller copy of the symbol is on my green military cap. I frown at the irony of the name and the Traveler connection before heading out into the main station.

I hear the drums beating and the cries of joy as new recruits step into the train. I hate this train. This is the train that takes new recruits to war. Of course, fathers can’t wait to throw their children on that train. The young men and women are smiling, the fathers giving salutes, and the mothers happily waving. How can these people just give away their children? If they really love their children, wouldn’t they want them to stay? I shake my head and stare at the ground as I exit the crowded station. My face twists into an awful grimace while remembering that this practice goes on every day.

Outside, I cheer up a little, but I am still left mad. Keron is a very tropical planet, and the nature easily blossoms alongside civilization. I guide myself around the tropical ferns and trees as I head for the training center. That is the place where future recruits train themselves before going to war. It is also a good place to blow off some steam. Technically, I am a recruit. But, I am so awful at shooting, fighting, and survival skills that they would never dare to send me to war.


I decide to go with Weaponcraft, the practice of using “harmless” weapons. That way, I could be alone while getting rid of my anger. Recruits in training don’t shoot each other with real weapons — no, that could mean death. When it comes to training, you stick with good old plastic targets. This is the subject I’m best at, and even then I’m not that good. I walk down a few hallways and stand before a doorway with a touch screen embedded on the wall beside it. I choose my settings on the touch screen. I make it the lowest and easiest level possible, single player, and for twenty minutes only. Then I enter the room which looks like just an empty room with props of grass and trees. That is, until they begin bringing out the holograms of my “enemies”.

I didn’t want anyone to see that I was attempting to “train” at war here. If they recruit me, I will be trapped on this planet. What kind of train station am I going to find in the battlefield? I can guarantee you this: If I am sent to war on any planet, I will die.


I can’t help but think as I shoot the moving targets around me. What happens when I die? Will the universe fall apart when its only link between the worlds loses its life? Is it even possible for me to die? Will I just continue to age and age…forever? Even if I’m not immortal, and the universe doesn’t fall apart, who will remember me? My teachers, my boss, or maybe that guy from the park? Maybe Roxanne, but even then, she can just get over it. I left her with a cold shoulder anyways. No one will care. When I die—if I die—I will be easily forgotten.


I drop my head after I hit the last target. Funny how fast anger turns into depression. I would love to be able to talk so easily like the average person, or to tell someone about my powers. No one would understand though, I think as I exit the building and head back for the train station. Who could I possibly trust? I would need someone who could keep a secret: A big secret.


I shake my head, dismissing the thought. I couldn’t tell whether or not I could trust anyone, if I couldn’t talk to anyone about it. I weave through the crowd of families saying goodbye and headed into the abandoned station. I waited for the train, expecting for it to come in just a few seconds. It doesn’t. In fact, it takes almost forty minutes of pacing around and wondering if I was in the right part of the station before the train rolls in. Even then, it does something strange that it usually doesn’t usually do. It seems more flexible as it screeches to a halt. Then, once it stops, it seems to lose its flexibility. Then, the most surprising thing steps out of the train, then looks at me. It’s an adult male Keroronian. He’s blue, and has a yellow cap. He has a similar “T” symbol like me, but his is blue. He looks just as shocked; staring with wide eyes and a gaping mouth. I imagine that my face is identical. I close my mouth and try to calm down as I take a cautious step towards him. He does the same. I’m convinced that this is some sort of dream—or some kind of nightmare—as I stand still and wait for him to speak. But then I realize that I never know that I’m dreaming while I’m in a dream. I always just go with the dream, no matter strange it is. So, this must be real…right?
 
If that other traveler is Leo that would be the biggest coincidence. The one person she talks to is a traveler xD
I like it. But what are the travelers? What is their purpose? I'm sure we are going to find out, but those are the questions I am wondering now.
Btw, I totally RPed in something just like this ;D
 
shampoo-thief said:
If that other traveler is Leo that would be the biggest coincidence. The one person she talks to is a traveler xD
I like it. But what are the travelers? What is their purpose? I'm sure we are going to find out, but those are the questions I am wondering now.
Btw, I totally RPed in something just like this ;D

You shall see!

Also...yah. I sort of needed to test things out with the RPG before writing stuff down.

(The above line is total BS-and by that I mean bible school-now that I think about it.)
 
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