Yes...Now I'm about to prove to all of you that me repeatedly saying that I'm a good writer is not just for show.
I'd started this story quite a while back, with a little help from some friends of mine on how to get it up and running. Due to school and other concerns I couldn't write it very much, but now with all the spare time on my hands from Christmas break, I was finally able to finish this fanfic.
As you can see from the topic title, the fic is called Nightmare. Before I chose to submit it here, I wanted to finish the rough draft of the entire story, and then revise everything (proofreading and all that) to make a second draft...and then, only then would I post it. I finished the rough draft on Christmas Day, and the second draft 4 days later (yes, it took me 4 days to go through it all).
Please...if you're going to respond to this fanfic, make your reply constructive - be it feedback, comments, criticism, or anything else you have. I take a great deal of pride in my work, and if you say 'Nice story; I'm loving it, keep writing', that tells me absolutely nothing on how to improve (especially since considering the story has already been completed). If your reply is less than 20 words in length, I will ignore it.
The fanfic is 25 chapters long, spanning over almost 109 pages on Word, and therefore the average chapter length is just over 4 pages. However, the chapters at the start are shorter, and their length increases the more the story progresses. Note though that no chapter is shorter than 2 pages.
Each chapter has a 1-word title (which is a noun), corresponding to the overall theme of the chapter. I'll also give a commentary for the start of the chapter, but not for the end (after you've read it). I want you to get your own thoughts and impressions from reading it, instead of the ones I give you.
Clear? All right, if you're interested, keep going!
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Directory:
Chapter 1 - Nightmare
Chapter 2 - Repetition
Chapter 3 - Visit
Chapter 4 - Respect
Chapter 5 - Partner
Chapter 6 - Mystery
Chapter 7 - Hero
Chapter 8 - Battle
Chapter 9 - Suspicion
Chapter 10 - Guilt
Chapter 11 - Knight
Chapter 12 - Terror
Chapter 13 - Delusion
Chapter 14 - Rest
Chapter 15 - Savior
Chapter 16 - Meeting
Chapter 17 - Tracked
Chapter 18 - Courage
Chapter 19 - Heart
Chapter 20 - Death
Chapter 21 - Wheel
Chapter 22 - Life
Chapter 23 - Trick
Chapter 24 - Climax
Chapter 25 - Dream
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Chapter 1 was originally intended as the prologue for the story, but during the re-write, I decided to elaborate and extend on it a bit, so that it's now effectively a full-fledged chapter. As with all of the chapter 1s/prologues I write for my fanfics, this serves as an introduction to the story only, and sets the stage for the environment for what will happen next in the plot.
Stats for this chapter (1):
Page Count: 2.0; Word Count: 1357
Feedback, comments, and constructive criticism are always appreciated. However, as I have previously stated, keep your replies at a minimum of 20 words apiece. This is not a PB forum rule, but I'll probably ignore you if you don't have much to say.
I'd started this story quite a while back, with a little help from some friends of mine on how to get it up and running. Due to school and other concerns I couldn't write it very much, but now with all the spare time on my hands from Christmas break, I was finally able to finish this fanfic.
As you can see from the topic title, the fic is called Nightmare. Before I chose to submit it here, I wanted to finish the rough draft of the entire story, and then revise everything (proofreading and all that) to make a second draft...and then, only then would I post it. I finished the rough draft on Christmas Day, and the second draft 4 days later (yes, it took me 4 days to go through it all).
Please...if you're going to respond to this fanfic, make your reply constructive - be it feedback, comments, criticism, or anything else you have. I take a great deal of pride in my work, and if you say 'Nice story; I'm loving it, keep writing', that tells me absolutely nothing on how to improve (especially since considering the story has already been completed). If your reply is less than 20 words in length, I will ignore it.
The fanfic is 25 chapters long, spanning over almost 109 pages on Word, and therefore the average chapter length is just over 4 pages. However, the chapters at the start are shorter, and their length increases the more the story progresses. Note though that no chapter is shorter than 2 pages.
Each chapter has a 1-word title (which is a noun), corresponding to the overall theme of the chapter. I'll also give a commentary for the start of the chapter, but not for the end (after you've read it). I want you to get your own thoughts and impressions from reading it, instead of the ones I give you.
Clear? All right, if you're interested, keep going!
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Directory:
Chapter 1 - Nightmare
Chapter 2 - Repetition
Chapter 3 - Visit
Chapter 4 - Respect
Chapter 5 - Partner
Chapter 6 - Mystery
Chapter 7 - Hero
Chapter 8 - Battle
Chapter 9 - Suspicion
Chapter 10 - Guilt
Chapter 11 - Knight
Chapter 12 - Terror
Chapter 13 - Delusion
Chapter 14 - Rest
Chapter 15 - Savior
Chapter 16 - Meeting
Chapter 17 - Tracked
Chapter 18 - Courage
Chapter 19 - Heart
Chapter 20 - Death
Chapter 21 - Wheel
Chapter 22 - Life
Chapter 23 - Trick
Chapter 24 - Climax
Chapter 25 - Dream
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Chapter 1 was originally intended as the prologue for the story, but during the re-write, I decided to elaborate and extend on it a bit, so that it's now effectively a full-fledged chapter. As with all of the chapter 1s/prologues I write for my fanfics, this serves as an introduction to the story only, and sets the stage for the environment for what will happen next in the plot.
Stats for this chapter (1):
Page Count: 2.0; Word Count: 1357
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1 – Nightmare
The nightmare is real.
This world has become something so totally bent and corrupted beyond all measure that one can only fathom how it has come to reach this point. The people of the current day and age can only look back at the history that brought them to this point, and gaze back utterly stupefied as they can fathom no true explanation of how this current era was created; they can only muster three simple yet shocking words: ‘Somehow, it did’.
And by now, you most likely have no idea what I’m talking about. Indeed, I shall give you to a detailed explanation before I get too much further into this story which I am about to paint for you.
I am sure many of you have heard of the strange friendly creatures called ‘Pokémon’. You recognize them as partners, companions, even valiant warriors at times, and many other people much like yourself consider them an integral part of their lives. But in this world? People would either stare at you not knowing what in the world you could possibly be talking about...or they would find you insane, delusional, or even accuse you of being some sort of dissident or insurrectionist, perhaps even calling the police force to take you. I assume you would find this a very surprising reaction, would you not? Something like that, at least to you, would be an act considered almost unspeakable, but in the world I speak of, it is perfectly normal, even acceptable. Now you are wondering yourself what kind of world this is, aren’t you? Let me offer to you a fuller explanation.
This world wasn’t always like it is in this day. In fact, this world used to be much like the world of Pokémon you know in the present time – countries regions across the world with trainers, gym leaders who distribute their badges showing a trainer’s worth, grand sprawling landscapes consisting of objects to snowy mountains and arid deserts, and everything in between...in short, everything you would expect a world of Pokémon to be, was what this world was like...in the past. The most integral part of all were the Pokémon, which most of humankind was dependent upon for survival, in multiple ways – partnership, food, ecosystems – you name it, Pokémon had a hand, paw, or talon in it in some form or capacity.
That all changed when the blight of ‘advanced technology’ appeared. Granted, there was some technology before, and I am sure you are quite familiar with some of it, such as wireless Pokémon exchanges, telecommunications, and electronic storage systems, but those things of the past pale in comparison to the elaborate mechanisms of this world’s current day and age. This paradigm shift first began when a certain inventor, full of vim and vigor, and incredibly enthusiastic in his pursuits, created a purely synthetic Pokémon. To be simple, the Pokémon species of choice that was chosen for the experiment was Chatot. The resulting synthetic looked like a Chatot, felt like a Chatot, acted like a Chatot, even grew like a Chatot...but it was nothing more than a cold heartless machine, doing nothing more than that which was pre-programmed into it. The scientific community of the day reasoned that, this way, there would be no chance of abnormal or harmful behavior of any kind, and so these synthetic Pokémon would be fully under the control of the wishes of their creators.
Deeming this initial synthetic a success, great advances were made into this new discipline. At the same time, as the synthetics became more and more complex, the machines around them grew equally as complex. Before very long, there were objects such as giant monorails spanning the skies, connecting all the regions together with an elaborate train system, kept going by a timetable that would ensure trains would always run on time, no matter the weather. With each new creation, every contingency that could possibly arise was planned for, so the resulting products could be deemed to be ‘perfect’, so to speak. The world had been brought closer together even more so than before...but in exchange, it was slowly transforming the planet into a spider’s prison of cold lifeless metal, kept alive only by its desire to advance deeper and deeper into its spiraling vicious cycle, of which there was no escape. Ultimately, the humans of the higher echelons of government reasoned that since humankind as a whole was greatly self-sufficient, they no longer needed the ‘real’ Pokémon to aid them in their living, for their synthetic copies ‘had no flaws, unlike that which is seen in nature’, or so it was said. As a result, Pokémon everywhere were persecuted, driven away from society, branded as outcasts or even demons. Many valiant trainers of Pokémon fought against this evil way of thinking, but they too were brutally murdered by another creation of technology – the soulless ‘synthetic army’, as it had come to be called...and, as you would expect, the ‘synthetic army’ is a vast array of Pokémon synthetics designed only to expunge threats, the substance of which were decided by those who controlled the army.
Eventually, history had reached a point where there were very few Pokémon left alive on the planet. Sensing the humans would come and finish them off forever, they appealed to the Watchers – a class of beings who watch over the world from a higher plane – for deliverance from the hands of those who sought their lives, and so the Watchers offered a proposition. They stated that they would be able to save the Pokémon by transferring them to another plane of existence, but in so doing, they would lose their physical form, becoming spirits. Initially they were reluctant to the idea, but since they saw they had no other choice, they agreed, and were transported by the Watchers to another plane – the Spirit Plane. The humans who had fled with the Pokémon to escape the synthetic army asked if they too could cross over to the Spirit Plane as well, and the Watchers in their benevolence granted their request.
How do I know all of this, you ask? I am the author of this story of which you are currently reading, and as such have the ability to record everything that goes on in this world. I am effectively a chronicler, a record-keeper of certain events in existence. Having once lived among humankind spinning my stories of worlds within worlds, I was transposed to this plane by one of the Watchers countless ages ago – and now I spend my existence by recording all the worthwhile stories to tell. This is definitely one of the more tragic ones in my collection of yarns, and remembering the events that transpired during this time give me great pain to put them to writing once again.
Despite the entire world becoming largely hostile towards the thought of the past – especially ‘non-synthetic’ Pokémon – the Pokémon, now called Spirits due to their current form, still believe that some virtue exists within humankind. Though the world as a whole, and its government, shuns any thought of the past and its morals and ideas, including inter-dependency with Pokémon-kind, certain individuals have not. And thus, the Spirits have traveled to the Human Plane and appeared before specific people, yet not showing themselves to others. Spirits are effectively beings who have no physical presence but can be seen by whoever they reveal themselves to. Some have even formed ‘pacts’ with human partners, forever vowing to stay by their sides through thick and thin, with a bond of friendship so unbreakable that no force could ever shatter it – this bond is standardly materialized in the form of a rope or tether which connects human and Spirit together. The Pokémon still remember the idea of a ‘trainer’, before the nightmare enveloped the planet, and many yearn for the days of the past where things were much different than they are now. This story, which I write to you now, chronicles the roles of these people and their Pokémon partners, and how they will forever impact the dark mechanical world in which they live...
1 – Nightmare
The nightmare is real.
This world has become something so totally bent and corrupted beyond all measure that one can only fathom how it has come to reach this point. The people of the current day and age can only look back at the history that brought them to this point, and gaze back utterly stupefied as they can fathom no true explanation of how this current era was created; they can only muster three simple yet shocking words: ‘Somehow, it did’.
And by now, you most likely have no idea what I’m talking about. Indeed, I shall give you to a detailed explanation before I get too much further into this story which I am about to paint for you.
I am sure many of you have heard of the strange friendly creatures called ‘Pokémon’. You recognize them as partners, companions, even valiant warriors at times, and many other people much like yourself consider them an integral part of their lives. But in this world? People would either stare at you not knowing what in the world you could possibly be talking about...or they would find you insane, delusional, or even accuse you of being some sort of dissident or insurrectionist, perhaps even calling the police force to take you. I assume you would find this a very surprising reaction, would you not? Something like that, at least to you, would be an act considered almost unspeakable, but in the world I speak of, it is perfectly normal, even acceptable. Now you are wondering yourself what kind of world this is, aren’t you? Let me offer to you a fuller explanation.
This world wasn’t always like it is in this day. In fact, this world used to be much like the world of Pokémon you know in the present time – countries regions across the world with trainers, gym leaders who distribute their badges showing a trainer’s worth, grand sprawling landscapes consisting of objects to snowy mountains and arid deserts, and everything in between...in short, everything you would expect a world of Pokémon to be, was what this world was like...in the past. The most integral part of all were the Pokémon, which most of humankind was dependent upon for survival, in multiple ways – partnership, food, ecosystems – you name it, Pokémon had a hand, paw, or talon in it in some form or capacity.
That all changed when the blight of ‘advanced technology’ appeared. Granted, there was some technology before, and I am sure you are quite familiar with some of it, such as wireless Pokémon exchanges, telecommunications, and electronic storage systems, but those things of the past pale in comparison to the elaborate mechanisms of this world’s current day and age. This paradigm shift first began when a certain inventor, full of vim and vigor, and incredibly enthusiastic in his pursuits, created a purely synthetic Pokémon. To be simple, the Pokémon species of choice that was chosen for the experiment was Chatot. The resulting synthetic looked like a Chatot, felt like a Chatot, acted like a Chatot, even grew like a Chatot...but it was nothing more than a cold heartless machine, doing nothing more than that which was pre-programmed into it. The scientific community of the day reasoned that, this way, there would be no chance of abnormal or harmful behavior of any kind, and so these synthetic Pokémon would be fully under the control of the wishes of their creators.
Deeming this initial synthetic a success, great advances were made into this new discipline. At the same time, as the synthetics became more and more complex, the machines around them grew equally as complex. Before very long, there were objects such as giant monorails spanning the skies, connecting all the regions together with an elaborate train system, kept going by a timetable that would ensure trains would always run on time, no matter the weather. With each new creation, every contingency that could possibly arise was planned for, so the resulting products could be deemed to be ‘perfect’, so to speak. The world had been brought closer together even more so than before...but in exchange, it was slowly transforming the planet into a spider’s prison of cold lifeless metal, kept alive only by its desire to advance deeper and deeper into its spiraling vicious cycle, of which there was no escape. Ultimately, the humans of the higher echelons of government reasoned that since humankind as a whole was greatly self-sufficient, they no longer needed the ‘real’ Pokémon to aid them in their living, for their synthetic copies ‘had no flaws, unlike that which is seen in nature’, or so it was said. As a result, Pokémon everywhere were persecuted, driven away from society, branded as outcasts or even demons. Many valiant trainers of Pokémon fought against this evil way of thinking, but they too were brutally murdered by another creation of technology – the soulless ‘synthetic army’, as it had come to be called...and, as you would expect, the ‘synthetic army’ is a vast array of Pokémon synthetics designed only to expunge threats, the substance of which were decided by those who controlled the army.
Eventually, history had reached a point where there were very few Pokémon left alive on the planet. Sensing the humans would come and finish them off forever, they appealed to the Watchers – a class of beings who watch over the world from a higher plane – for deliverance from the hands of those who sought their lives, and so the Watchers offered a proposition. They stated that they would be able to save the Pokémon by transferring them to another plane of existence, but in so doing, they would lose their physical form, becoming spirits. Initially they were reluctant to the idea, but since they saw they had no other choice, they agreed, and were transported by the Watchers to another plane – the Spirit Plane. The humans who had fled with the Pokémon to escape the synthetic army asked if they too could cross over to the Spirit Plane as well, and the Watchers in their benevolence granted their request.
How do I know all of this, you ask? I am the author of this story of which you are currently reading, and as such have the ability to record everything that goes on in this world. I am effectively a chronicler, a record-keeper of certain events in existence. Having once lived among humankind spinning my stories of worlds within worlds, I was transposed to this plane by one of the Watchers countless ages ago – and now I spend my existence by recording all the worthwhile stories to tell. This is definitely one of the more tragic ones in my collection of yarns, and remembering the events that transpired during this time give me great pain to put them to writing once again.
Despite the entire world becoming largely hostile towards the thought of the past – especially ‘non-synthetic’ Pokémon – the Pokémon, now called Spirits due to their current form, still believe that some virtue exists within humankind. Though the world as a whole, and its government, shuns any thought of the past and its morals and ideas, including inter-dependency with Pokémon-kind, certain individuals have not. And thus, the Spirits have traveled to the Human Plane and appeared before specific people, yet not showing themselves to others. Spirits are effectively beings who have no physical presence but can be seen by whoever they reveal themselves to. Some have even formed ‘pacts’ with human partners, forever vowing to stay by their sides through thick and thin, with a bond of friendship so unbreakable that no force could ever shatter it – this bond is standardly materialized in the form of a rope or tether which connects human and Spirit together. The Pokémon still remember the idea of a ‘trainer’, before the nightmare enveloped the planet, and many yearn for the days of the past where things were much different than they are now. This story, which I write to you now, chronicles the roles of these people and their Pokémon partners, and how they will forever impact the dark mechanical world in which they live...
Feedback, comments, and constructive criticism are always appreciated. However, as I have previously stated, keep your replies at a minimum of 20 words apiece. This is not a PB forum rule, but I'll probably ignore you if you don't have much to say.