Interesting take on Giovanni as a little boy. I wonder if Kagemaru Himeno had thought about how, and more importantly, why he became the leader of Team Rocket. Is there a noble cause hiding behind a mask of villainy? Is the problem of Team Rocket not at the top, but at the grunt level?
Three things that bothered me though:
• There's a word choice error on Page 5. "You're hurt really badly," strictly speaking, means whoever hurt Persian did a really bad job at it. It should read, "You're hurt really bad," which means Persian is in urgent condition. Of course, we could all say that it's coming from the mouth of a child...though this child is very smart and very hardy.
• The boy somehow either had a sixth sense that the doctor at the Pokémon Center was up to no good, and neither was the Pokémon Collection Group, or he had some bad experiences with that bunch in the past. There's absolutely no way he could've figured out they're villainous from the information given to him. Even the van pulling out of a garage at the PokéCenter would have worked or suspicion that there's no Nurse Joy there.
• Persian's Screech was loud enough to knock the drivers of the van out cold, yet the boy was completely unaffected.
I know this isn't to be taken seriously though. It was probably a spur-of-the-moment thing for Himeno.