Writing The Chronicles of Rin (Chapter 1 is up!)

As Zyflair said, work on the dialouge but otherwise this looks like it's good! And maybe ( just a suggestion ) you could put a link to the story in your signature. As I see you have some space that can be used.
 
When she got there, she sat on the other side of me, the left side was being occupied by Emily.
“Hi guys!!!” She exclaimed.
“Hey, Ashe.” Emily replied.
“Hey. Did you get your stuff?” I said, looking at Ashe.
“Yeah. I came by your house, but your parents said that you guys had left without me, so I decided to go get my stuff. I got some spell tags, a pouch, and a bow! It’s made from an oak tree!” Ashe showed us her new things, and her golden silk pouch with a Ho-oh design on it.
“Cool!” I said, showing her my stuff, and Emily did the same.
“So…when are we leaving?” Ashe asked.
“We are leaving at night, when it will be easier to travel. During the day, there are bad pokemon on the Outskirts. Once we pass there, we can rest up and decide how we are going to travel.” I explained.
“Okay, thanks. Ah! That reminds me…”


(I am still working on this guys..)
 
I am sorry guys for not updating in a whilel but my laptop won't let me edit the story, and that is what it is on. I will do my best to fix this.
 
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