Writing Time Fracture (Chapter One: Cyrus)

Lenny

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Prologue

We all have something wrong with us. Something we cannot control. Let it be a habit or a character trait, we cannot change who we are. Some have ignored their flaws and others used their flaws as an escape from reality. A flaw is a flaw, and justice is justice.

It was June 15, 2006. A huge crowd of people flocked at the center of Hearthome City, where it seemed that an announcement was being made by Team Galactic. It seemed like a harmless thing from even a bird’s eye point of view, but from a sniper’s point of view, it was a dangerous thing.

Team Galactic’s leader, Ray Skylar, was standing in front of the short microphone that had a long wire connected to it, which connected to big speakers that stood behind him. “Testing, testing”. Everything was perfectly fine, except for a flaw that would change Team Galactic’s history.

A man holding a somewhat large suitcase entered the hotel that was next to the place where the announcement would be held. He picked up his card key and went up to his room. There was a small window that was positioned perfectly towards the announcement.

He opened up the suitcase, revealing a sniper rifle with a large scope attached to it. He set up the gun and opened the window a little, leaving nothing suspicious behind. The scope was dusty and had to be brushed off, which is exactly what he did.

He put his eye up to the scope and pointed it towards Ray Skylar, Team Galactic’s leader. “I’ve seen what you do in the future. You have to be stopped now, before it’s too late” the man said. He placed his finger in front of the trigger. The man pulled the trigger and the bullet struck Ray in the head.

Screams and shouts were heard from Hearthome City, but their cries would not bring their leader back to life. The sniper pulled out a PokeBall from his backpack. “Go, Gardevoir.” All the sniper did was nod and Gardevoir placed her hands on his shoulders. Moments later, the two were teleported away from the hotel room.

Only a few minutes passed and the police cars rolled into the crime scene. Chief James Wilsbrow came out of his car and was greeted by a few of his co-workers. “Get Jen and Ryan here right away” he said in a deep, rusty voice.

Another police car came up to the crime scene, but this time, a somewhat young man and woman exited the car. “We’re here, sir” said the man.

“Good to see you could make it, Ryan and Jen” he said sarcastically. “Team Galactic’s leader was shot in the head, by a sniper. Now we’ve checked most of the hotel rooms and there aren’t any weapons or any evidence that would suggest a sniper rifle was in the room. Go investigate, do your magic.”

Ryan was a somewhat tall man, about 6’1”, and had pale white skin. His hair was brown and short, only a little longer than a buzz-cut. Jen, on the other hand, had tan-colored skin and was a lot shorter than Ryan. Her hair was long and brown and beautifully matched her personality.

Ryan grabbed one of the PokeBalls that was strapped onto his belt. He pressed the button, releasing the human-like Pokemon. “Gallade, let’s go” Ryan commanded. The two ran to the entrance of the hotel to inspect the area.

The lady at the front desk must have seen him and maybe the camera got a quick shot of his face Ryan thought as he made his way to the front desk. “Excuse me, but have you any idea which man it was that could have been the murderer?” Ryan asked. Suddenly, his phone vibrated. Ryan grabbed the phone out of his pocket and took a look at the message that the chief had sent him.

“Room 551 is the most suspicious; there was a suitcase left behind with several parts of a sniper rifle. This is most likely the room of the sniper, so ask the person at the front desk who ordered room 551” the text message read.

“Sorry about that, but who ordered room 551 for this morning?” The lady typed in a couple words into her computer and a file came up.

The lady had a confused look on her face, but told Ryan exactly what was on the computer screen. “It seems that he registered with us with the name of C. Seems like he covered up his tracks somewhat well” she said with a small chuckle.

Ryan turned around and exited the hotel with Gallade. “Chief, it seems that he registered his name on their database as C. Could this be a codename?” Ryan said with a shrug. “Has Jen gathered any information?”

Jen dashed over to them with her Electabuzz by her side. “They’re taking Ray’s body to the hospital right now and extracting the bullet from his head to see exactly what kind of gun we’re dealing with here. We should have our answer in about two hours” Jen responded. “Alright, come back into the Poke Ball Electabuzz.”

The Chief grinded his teeth against each other; he was annoyed that there was so little evidence in such an important event. “I’ll be at my office. When you’re done here, head back and we’ll wait for the results of the bullet extraction.” He went back into his car, backed it up, and drove off.

Jen sighed and looked up at Ryan. “Are you alright? You seem disappointed.”

“I’m not disappointed. The fact that innocent people are being killed is what bothers me. Team Galactic has always worked to help for the good. This event could even trigger a retaliation of some sort. It could change Team Galactic completely” Ryan explained, but he wasn’t really sure he knew what he was talking about. “I’ll be at my house, contact me when they get the bullet information and I’ll head down to the station.” He took out his empty Poke Ball and returned Gallade to it.

Jen sighed and went to the car to meet up with Ryan. “Drop me off at the station, please.” Ryan nodded and they entered the car.

He quickly dropped her off and drove to his house. “Home, sweet home. A place to get away from anyone, anything, and everything.” He lay down on the couch and closed his eyes. Seconds later, the phone rang, and it was Jen. “My goodness, already?”

Ryan picked himself up and picked up the phone. “Have you got the bullet?”

“Yes, but it’s complicated. Get down here right away.”

Thanks to:
Dictator Dauntless for finding 2 mistakes
Wariopower for helping me come up with some of the names
CCloud for nothing [16:39] <CCloud> .: put me in there somewhere :.
 
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Very nice job Lenny! Everything is really nice and I'm excited for the coming of Chapter 1! =D
WP
 
RE: Time Fracture (Prologue is up)

I've talked to you about most things.

I think as far as mystery goes it opened rather well, sinc eyou don't really know what's going on, but you have an incentive to find out. Just make sure you pust the next bit quickly--you risk angering your audience in such a story.
 
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I like it. It's different then other stories, but in a good way. And please come out with Chapter 1 soon.
 
RE: Time Fracture (Prologue is up)

Ehh, thanks guys. Now that it's summer, I'll have plenty of free time to work on this, although it's late now and I don't want to make any mistakes when writing, so I'll begin writing tomorrow. Thanks for the feedback, though!
 
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Hmm, so is this the fan fic you are talking about :)

I have to say it's a good plot, I can't wait to see more coming from this. It seems like an interesting plot, Team Galactic good? I guess I'll have to wait and see!
 
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Well this is in the past, remember. Cyrus is yet to be their leader. And yes, this was the fic I was talking about in our chat yesterday xD
 
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Oh I see, okay I'm all caught up now, I really can't wait to see what happens in the next chapter, best of luck to you :)
 
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Yeah, cool set up. This guy kills the nice leader, and they turn to Cyrus for revenge. Predictiable yet still a decent read.

dmaster out.
 
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Wow, this story is very suspenseful. Although Team Galactic is supposed to be an evil alliance, it seems in this fan fic, Team Galactic seems more innocent than the man who was trying to put an end to them, lol. I like this story and I'm excited for more. Keep writing as soon as you get a chance. =)

- Luigi
 
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d master342 said:
Yeah, cool set up. This guy kills the nice leader, and they turn to Cyrus for revenge. Predictiable yet still a decent read.

dmaster out.

Who says they turn to Cyrus? We know NOTHING about what the aftermath is going to be yet. They MIGHT turn to Cyrus, but they might not. After all, I'm sure there are other fictional people that could come in... besides, who says they are going to seek revenge?

This is definitely a different fic, and that's what will make it good to read. Good luck with this, and keep at it :)
 
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Meh, you find out who the killer is in the next chapter, if you use common sense, that is -_-'

Thanks for the comments, very appreciated! And yes, Cal is correct about fictional characters in this. There's one main character who's fictional that will be revealed in Ch. 1.
 
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gamercal said:
d master342 said:
Yeah, cool set up. This guy kills the nice leader, and they turn to Cyrus for revenge. Predictiable yet still a decent read.

dmaster out.

Who says they turn to Cyrus? We know NOTHING about what the aftermath is going to be yet. They MIGHT turn to Cyrus, but they might not. After all, I'm sure there are other fictional people that could come in... besides, who says they are going to seek revenge?

This is definitely a different fic, and that's what will make it good to read. Good luck with this, and keep at it :)

The set-up to the present story alludes to it using common sense clues. ;p

dmaster out.
 
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Yeah now I see it. It's like a mystery story neat.
(how do you get people to post on your thread? No one does on mine.)
 
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I'm 1300 words into Chapter. I'll probably go up to 2500-3000 words for the chapter. Should be up in 2-3 days :]
 
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I finally took the time to read this and it was good. Can't wait until the next chapter. Interesting start for Team Galactic. Very creative and different than other fics.

=]
 
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Chapter One: Cyrus

“Ryan, look at this bullet” Jen said. She held up the bullet in a plastic bag up to his well-rounded face. It was completely silver, but engraved on the bullet was the letter C. “Here, come to my office. I think I have a new lead.”

Ryan followed her footsteps. She seemed to be anxious to tell him what she had found out. “Alright, look at this.” She pointed to the computer screen. “The next person in charge of Team Galactic would be Cyrus because of Ray’s death. Now, Cyrus’s name starts with a C. The letter engraved in the bullet…C.” Jen waited for a few moments to let Ryan comprehend what he had just heard.

“We’ll have to bring him in. It’s the only way, and we’ll interrogate him. But I don’t think that this is enough evidence to put him in jail. We’ll see what we can do” Ryan explained. “Have you told this to Chief Wilsbrow yet? I think he’d be interested.”

Jen smirked. “Already done, but I’m going to need you to come with me. A girl as good looking doesn’t want to get her beauty ruined.”

“Don’t flatter yourself” Ryan said. “Are you ready to get this guy?”

“It seems that Cyrus lives all the way at Veilstone City. It’s about a ten minute drive from here. If we leave now…we should get there at about 4:30” Jen explained. Ryan nodded and they both exited the police station. They both entered the car and left.

At Veilstone City, the Team Galactic Headquarters were packed with Galactic grunts. The building was tall and had a few spikes on it. Cyrus was on the roof with a couple of other administrators of Team Galactic.

“Sir, Team Galactic is furious. They know you were Ray’s son, but still…they don’t believe you can fulfill his legacy. Bringing peace with the Legendary Pokemon? And after you put our organization in jeopardy by going into the future…? Although the grunts didn’t know that, Ray did, and he was just about to remove you from being second in command. Who would even want to kill Ray? Such…a loving person” said admin Garlo.

Admin Garlo, Cyrus’s cousin, was a Pokemon-loving person, but a loyal person, too. “Look, Garlo, I know we’ve grown up together, but times are getting dangerous. Cops are coming after me; they think I was the murderer. There’s only one way to prove me innocent…if someone else gets sniped down while I’m there. Do you get where I’m going?” Cyrus asked, hoping that the young admin would understand.

“I’m no murderer Cyrus Skylar” Garlo responded and shook his head. “Look, find someone else to be your murderer.”

“Who do you think you are? Disobeying my orders?! I am your new leader and as your leader, I command you, or I will take your position as administrator, and give it to someone else who is more loyal. Now, aren’t you loyal?” Cyrus said. “Look, if you don’t do this, I will go to jail. They’ll have evidence that it’s me, they probably framed me, whoever this murderer was. Please, cousin. The one time I need you, and you won’t be there for me? How nice of you.”

Garlo stepped back a bit as he saw two police officers enter through the ceiling entrance. “Cyrus, put your freaking hands on the back of your head” Ryan said. He was holding a small pistol in his hands and the gun was pointed towards the back of Cyrus’s head.

Cyrus did as he was told and looked at Garlo. “Choose. Your reputation is on the line” Cyrus said softly as Ryan approached him. Ryan took out his handcuffs and placed them around Cyrus’s hands.

“You have the right to remain silent. Anything you say can and will be used against you in a court of law. You have the right to speak to an attorney, and to have an attorney present during any questioning. If you cannot afford a lawyer, one will be provided for you at government expense” Ryan said. “Understood?” Cyrus nodded and was taken down to the police car.

Ryan pulled his cell phone out of his pocket and began calling Chief Wilsbrow. “Sir, we have Cyrus with us. We’ll be bringing him in now. I think this is our guy; it makes sense.”

“Good, good. Get over here right away and first, show him the bullet. Maybe that will jog his memory.” Chief Wilsbrow hung up and so did Ryan.

Ryan raced back to the car with Cyrus in the back seat and Jen next to him. “Jen, this guy might be manipulative. Try not to talk to him, and if you must, make sure you don’t get caught up in anything he says. Got it?” Ryan whispered in her ear.

Jen nodded and turned around to look at Cyrus. He looked older than her, but she couldn’t pin-point a specific age. His scars made it harder, too. The biggest scar that stood out to her was the one across his eye. “How did you get that scar?”

“The roof of my house fell on me and one of the pieces of wood completely cut my eye lid and the area around it” Cyrus said. He placed his hand to cover the scar. “I’m…no criminal. Why have you decided to take me in?”

“Jen, don’t reply to him. He’s being manipulative, remember what I told you” Ryan whispered softly.

Jen simply turned away from Cyrus and looked at the road ahead. “There’s the station. You take Cyrus in?” Jen asked.

Ryan nodded and pulled the car into the parking spot. “Come with me” Ryan told Cyrus as he pulled him out of the car.

Chief Wilsbrow came outside to the car and stood next to Jen. “Jennette Wolfe. You have grown so much. This man we’re dealing here with…we don’t know what kind of person this is. Take care of yourself” he said and patted her on the back. “I’ll see you inside”. Chief went back inside without looking back at Jen.

Jen sighed and followed Chief back into the station. “Jen, I’m going to talk to him. Stay here, I might need you later. Alright?” Ryan asked. Jen nodded and watched Ryan make his way into the small holding cell.

“Cyrus…you know why you’re here?” Ryan asked. Before Cyrus could even begin to answer the question, Ryan answered it for him. “You’ve been accused of killing your father. You see this bullet?” He put the bullet up to Cyrus’s face. “It has a C engraved in it. Also, who else would want to kill Ray except the next in command. It all makes sense, doesn’t it?”

Cyrus chuckled, “And that’s where your logic is flawed. First of all, why would the murderer be stupid enough to put the first letter of his first name on the bullet. That’s like giving away the whole investigation. Secondly, I loved my father. I did things for him that were unimaginable, even if he may have not appreciated it at the time. Look, don’t you get it? I was framed. That explains it perfectly.”

“Look Cyrus, I don’t know who you think you are, but-“

Jen ran into the holding cell. “Sorry to interrupt you Ryan, but Cyrus isn’t our man. There’s been another shooting. Same bullet, different person; come on, we have to go!” Jen said.

Ryan jumped to his feet and closed the cell. “You will be released once we’re sure this murderer is the same as the one back in Hearthome City” Ryan assured Cyrus.

“So, where was this murder?”

“Veilstone City, on the rooftop; where we were. Remember?”

“Yes, I do. Who’s the victim?” Ryan asked.

“Admin Garlo, Cyrus’s cousin. It seems like this person is killing those close to Cyrus, and if this is the pattern, he could eventually kill Cyrus. It’s in our best interest to protect Cyrus, if he wants protection, that is.”

Ryan coughed. “It seems like this guy is always a step ahead of us. How can that be?”

Jen chuckled a little, “Come on, and don’t beat yourself up over it. Let’s head over to Veilstone and see what there is, ok?”

Ryan nodded and they headed out the door. Seconds later, a bullet rushes by Ryan’s ear, missing him by several centimeters. “Get down and run behind the car” Ryan told Jen, and she did as told. He ran behind a different car and pulled out his gun.

Son of a gun, I won’t let you get away with this. Ryan looked through the rearview mirror of the car to reveal that the shooter was standing on top of the building across from the station.

Suddenly, a bright-red flash blinded Ryan momentarily. When he looked through the rearview mirror again, the man was gone. In the sky, though, was a Flygon, and on top of it, was a man. “That’s him…I know it.” The Flygon flew away like a jet, leaving no trace of itself behind.

“Jen, you alright?” Ryan called out. Jen picked herself up and walked over to Ryan.

“Do you have any idea who that was and why they would come after us?”

“No, but I’ll find out. Come on, let’s get to Veilstone. I doubt the killer would be stupid enough to leave his trail behind again, though.” Ryan jumped into the police car and him and Jen left for Veilstone City.

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That's the end of the chapter. I know I didn't live up to my end of putting it at 2500+ words, but I think that its purpose as a chapter is fine. Comments/suggestions/mistakes are all appreciated. I believe I left you with a little mystery, and thanks to Dictator Dauntless for reminding me to add some foreshadowing ;p
 
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Very nice chapter Lenny, always making me look forward to more. What'll Cyrus be up to next time... =)
WP
 
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Wow I can't beleive I was wrong about that (Lenny, you know ahat I'm talking about)...I thought I was right for sure...oh well, more suspense is always better!
 
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