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Name:Mo
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Age:26
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I'm very sorry I haven't been on for awhile but I had a lot of stuff going on and I couldn't get this chapter to you but here it is and to make up for it I'm posting two chapters so I have it right here for you...ok...here it is...ok.....um....here it is!

Chapter 5: Father VS Son
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"Scizor," Ken said.
"Yes..."
"I don't know what to do."
"Just leave that to me."
"Uh, hello I have a world to plunge into darkness here!" Seth said.
"Machamp use vital throw."
Machamp grabbed Scizor and gets set to throw him.
"How bout a little CRABHAMMER!" Scizor said hitting Machamp with one swing of his claw.
"Machamp are we going to take that from them!" Seth cried.
"MACHAMP!" it replied.
"Then use sismec toss!"
Machamp grabbed Scizor again and jumped into the air simaltaniously throwing him down to the ground.
"You ok?" Ken asked.
"Yeah, don't worry about me." Scizor replied.
"Use Infermory!" Seth cried as Machamp threw a mighty blow at Scizor.
Scizor takes the blow with no sweat.
"You sure your alright?"
"Yeah."
"INFERMORY!"
"Ken...I can't hold on much longer!"
"Come on you have to..."
"It's to late it's got us..."
"Goodbye Scizor..."
"Goodbye Ke...."

Well that was intresting wasn't it but it's not over so here is
Chapter 6: The Afterlife
"Uh...where am I?" Ken said.
"Welcome to Heaven." said a girl dressed in white.
"Who are you?" Ken asked now up on his feet.
"I am Wasan ruler of heaven!" Wasan said.
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"Where's Scizor?" Ken asked.
"He is in the Pokemon restoring chamber. It's harder for Pokemon to wake up from death."
"That makes absolutly no sense at all!!!!"
"Welcome to heaven this is where you will spend the rest of your afterlife."
"Wait...what...no my dad has gone all evil and the world is going to be destroyed!"
"Oh don't worry about that your not on earth anymore."
"But I finally have the chance to be a hero."
"A hero...you want to be a hero..."
"Well...Yeah!"
"Ok...you can stay here for the night and tommorow we'll battle and if you win...you can leave heaven."
"OK..." Ken said uneasaly thinking of the battle that wound him up here in heaven.

CHAPTER 7: MATCH MADE IN HEAVEN​

COMING SOON​
 
Chapter 7: Match Made in Heaven

"You all right Scizor?" Ken asked.
"Yeah," Scizor said. "I'm just a little fategued after the whole I'm in heaven thing started kicking in."
"Don't worry if we win we won't have to stay here at all."
"Are you ready to battle or what?" Wasan asked.
"Alright!" Ken and Scizor said together.

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"Ditto, Go!" Wasan said.
"A DITTO?" Ken and Scizor said both puzzled.
"Transform!"
"Ditto!" it said as it transformed into a Ho-oh.
"Oh...:(a Ditto." Ken and Scizor said with a low amount of enthusiasum as Scizor was blasted with a powerful flamethrower.
"OOOOFFFFFFFFF!" Scizor said being knocked onto the ground.
"You OK?" Ken asked.
"Yeah! But that was one powerful flamethrower!" Scizor answered.
"Use Crabhammer!" Ken said as Scizor knocked the Ho-Oh down to the ground.
"Ditto use Transform." Wasan said as ditto tranformed into a Sandslash.
"Use Dig!" Wasan said as the Sandslash buried under ground.
"Use Double Team!" Ken said.
":0" Wasan was shocked. "Head up Sandslash."
But Sandslashes attack failed to hit the real Scizor!
"Hyper Beam!!!!" Ken said as the remaining ten Scizors blasted the Sandslash.
"No Ditto!"
"Diiiiiiitooooooooo:(" Ditto was KOed.
"Alright we won!" Ken said.
"Yes, we did :D." Scizor said smiling
After the battle...at the gates of heaven...​
"Thank you for battling me." Wasan said.
"So how do we get back to earth." Ken asked.
"You jump."
"WE WHAT!!!!!"
"You jump."
"That's a long way down to earth." Ken said looking down.
"Just jump." Wasan said.
Ken looked at Scizor.
"I will if you will." he said
"Well here it goooooooooooooooooooooooes." Ken said jumping off.
"Jeranimooooooooooooooooooooooo!" Scizor said jumping right after Ken.
"Ditto follow them and lead them on the right path." Wasan said.
"Yes Ma'm" Ditto said jumping off.
"Should I have told him...?" Wasan asked herself.

This is probly the last post I'll have in a week so keep this alive while I'm gone. Thanks :D SnorlaxShamen.
 
Now that I'm back from a well diserved vacation after some thought of this chapter and how to introduce Mo and Andrew. But here it is...
Chapter 8:Rumble in the...Forest?​
"AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!" Ken yelled as he and Scizor fell toward the ground covered by trees.
"Don't worry Ken I got you." Scizor said grabbing Ken by the arms and safly landing them in the Forest.
"Where are we?" Ken asked.
"There's a sign!"
The sign read:
Welcome
to
Eterna Forest!

Eterna City This way
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"Well...that answers that question"....
Deeper in the forest...​
"Can you stop that thing from scwerming?" Andrew asked his buddy Mo.
"Don't think I can." Mo replied trying to stop the contense of his bag from moving.
"Then just let it go it's too much of a hassel to get it out of here."
"You got it Boss." Mo said unting the bag and throwing it into the bushes as the two walked off.
"Did you hear someone Scizor?" Ken asked.
"No." Scizor replied with an odd stare,"Why?"
"I could of sworn I heared someone just up ahead."
Ken jumped.
"Somthings in the bushes!" Ken said.
"Calm down." Scizor said, "It's most likly just a..."
"Hi, I'm Yugana." said the girl poping out of the bush
"AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!" Ken and Scizor screamed.
"Uh...can I help you to." the girl said puzzled.
"Yeah don't scare travelers like that!" Ken said still a little shocked.
"Well...where are you guys headed?"
"Eterna City...Why?"
"I'm going there too can I join you?"
"How bout a battle you two!" said Andrew with a smerk on his face.
"Huh?" Ken and Yugana said.
"Yeah! A double battle two on two."
"But where's you partner?" Ken asked.
"Mo...Mo?" Andrew said looking around. "Mo you idiot get over here!"
"Sorry." Mo said as he sheepishly walks over beside Andrew.
"So how bout it?" Andrew asked.
"Alright!" Ken and Yugana said together.

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"Lapras use Ice Beam on Celibi!" Andrew ordered as his Lapras shot a blue beam at Yugana's Celibi.
Celibi dodged.
"You're not very nice!" Yugana shouted. "Celibi use grass knot!"
Celibi shot a ball of roots at Andrews Lapras.
It was SUPER EFECTIVE!
Knocking Lapras sideways.
"Lucario use Aura Sphere!" Mo said as his Lucario shot a glowing blue sphere at Scizor.
Scizor used Arial Ace to counter act the Aura Sphere knocking Lucario back.
"This is gone long enough Mo, it's time to use it!" Andrew said.
"Alright!" Mo said.
"Lapras..."
"Lucario..."
"INFERMORY!" Mo and Andrew said together as their Pokemon shot large masses of energy at Celbi and Scizor.
"Protect!" Ken and Yugana said as both their Pokemon protected themselves in a ball.
The infermories blasted halfway and completly covered the area in a cloud of dust.
When the dust cleared Lucario and Lapras were completly KOed.
"What do we do now Andrew?" Mo asked.
"There's only one thing to do...RUN AWAY!" Andrew yelled as the two ran returning their pokemon as they left.
"Well that was a intresting refrence..." Ken said.

As you can see this story gets better as it progresses check back soon for...
Chapter 9: The Not So Eternal Eterna
 
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