Writing My mystery dungeon fanfic!

Bonsly

Bonsly

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Im bored and I have nothing else to do so I though I would post this. First of all though, I am excepting characters for a little bit so if you want one please fill out this form:

Pokemon:
Characters name:
Known Attacks:
Personality:


Okay here is chapter 1!


Chapter 1: The biggest mystery!



It was Saturday, I thought it would be just another fun day for me

and my pal Jimmy the Buizel. But boy was I wrong. Something bad

happened that day, I was the only one who ecsaped, and this is how my story is told.

Icey, "come on and get your breakfeast"! My mother yelled. I looked

outside and then ran over to the field where everyone was. "Mom" I

said. "What is it?" She replied. "Well mom, im a Buizel and I want to

have some adventures before I die." I said looking at the ground. My

mom looked up at me and said "Yes you can go to the haunted

woods with Jimmy today." I jumped up and shouted "YES!" I then sat

down, ate my breakfeast, and ran off to where ever Jimmy was. But

you see, Jimmy is sort of a coward, he always runs off when ever he

thinks there is danger. But this time, I was gonna make sure he

stayed with me. "Hey, Icey, come here." I heard Jimmy say. I didnt

see Jimmy but I knew he was in a tree. I then heard a crack, and

down came Jimmy from a tree. "You moron you could kill yourself." I

said to him. "Oh well, at least I wouldnt have to be near you." Jimmy

replied with his tounge sticking out at me. I then said "Come on

Jimmy, we are going somewhere special today." As we walked we

stopped infront of the hunted woods. Jimmy looked at me, then

looked at the trail, then looked at me again, and just as he was

about to run off, I grabbed ahold of his tail and dragged him into the

woods. A few hours later we both walked of the haunted

woods. "You see Jimmy, that wasnt so bad." I said. "No but its

almost dark and my parents will be furious at me." Jimmy replied. As

we walked on I saw smoke coming from the village. I looked at

Jimmy and then said "I wonder whats going on?" Jimmy shrugged his

shoulders and we walked on. As we got closer I heard a strange

noise. I then ran up the hill and saw that everything was on fire. I

then heard Jimmy screaming "HELP! SOMEBODY HELP ME!!" I turned

around but somehow found myself in the middle of the fire. I tried to
put it out with my Water Gun attack but the fire was just to big. I

then turned my head to the noise I heard and as I turned something

hit me. I went flying through the fire and hit a tree. I was then knocked unconscious......



A few hours later I woke up in a grassy field. I then saw a small

pokemon walk towards me. As he got closer I saw that it was a Riolu.

The Riolu looked at me and I asked him "Where am I?" The Riolu

replied "I found you laying by a tree near a fire, so I took you to a

safer place." I then stood up walked over to a lake, and started to

drink from it. I then stood up and saw my reflection. I had a huge

scar on my face. It went across my right eye. The Riolu then

said "Your not well enough to go yet." I replied to him "Im well

enough. Whats your name anyways?" The Riolu replied "Im Kile" I

looked down and then back up at him and said "Nice to meet you. Im

Icey." As the two of us walked on the Kile brought up the subject

about the fire. He said "How did that fire start and what was going

on?" I replied "I was with my friend, Jimmy, and we just came back

from a walk and we found everything, our whole village on fire. And

then I was attacked. Thats why I have this scar. And now im gonna

find out whoever is responsible for this and make them pay." "Well

then I will help you. If thats alright with you." Kile replied. I

stopped, and then looked at Kile. I then said "Sure its fine but just so

you know, im not stopping until I find who did this. Everyone I know

is dead, I as I said before, I will make whoever did this to me pay."

Kile then said in a very sure voice "Fine, im coming along."






Okay thats the end of chapter 1. Chapter 2 will be up tommorow. Please tell me what you think of my fanfic.
 
There were a few spelling and grammar mistakes but I could understand what you were trying to say. Not bad, this seems OK.
 
I like how this is starting. The only thing I want to say is you should hit enter to make it easyer on the eyes and easyer to read after it changes speaker.

Also I would like to be in this fic!

Pokemon: Bulbasaur
Characters name: Muck
Known Attacks: Solar Beam, Vine Whip, Razor Leaf, Synthesis
Personality: Kind and caring but do not make him mad. Also puts others before himself unless they challenge him. He HATES loseing

Cant wait for the next chapter!
 
MUCKSTER said:
I like how this is starting. The only thing I want to say is you should hit enter to make it easyer on the eyes and easyer to read after it changes speaker.

Also I would like to be in this fic!

Pokemon: Bulbasaur
Characters name: Muck
Known Attacks: Solar Beam, Vine Whip, Razor Leaf, Synthesis
Personality: Kind and caring but do not make him mad. Also puts others before himself unless they challenge him. He HATES loseing

Cant wait for the next chapter!
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Okay I will try that. And sorry guys im still trying to work on my grammar. Chapter 2 will be up in a second.
 
Okay here is chapter 2:


Chapter 2: One Step Backwards.


As I walked along in the late night, me and Kile stopped for a rest.

Kile went off to collect some berries and other things to eat while I

just sat there. Now I dont want to sound lazy or nothing but I tried

to follow Kile but he was just to zig zaggy and before you know it

the little guy is gone. So anyway I was sitting there when I heard

some noise in the tall grass behind me. "Help me." I heard a voice

say. "Please sir, help me." There it was again. I turned around and

went into the grass. Before I knew it I bumped into something. I

looked down and there lied a small Bulbasaur. I dragged him to the

spot I was sitting where I found Kile waiting for me. "Who is this?"

Kile asked. "I dont know. I just found them in that grass over there."

I then pointed to where I found the Bulbasaur. The Bulbasaur then

hopped up, scared both me and Kile, and made a run for it. He didnt

get very far because he was kinda bigger and slower than anything I

had ever seen. Now he wasnt fat, but he wasnt an Olympic runner

either. He stopped, turned around, looked at me, and fell over again.

I guess the guy was trying to play dead. But it didnt really work. I

looked at him and said "We wont hurt, and you dont have to play

dead. Whats your name little guy?" The Bulbasaur then jumped back

up and said "My name is Muck." "Muck?" I replied. "Yes Muck." the

Blubasaur replied back. I then said "Well Muck my name is Icey. Oh

and by the way, where did you think you were going to go by running

away from us?" Muck replied "You making fun of me? I will show you

who is boss round these parts!" He then picked me up with Vine

Whip, and threw my across the whole field where I landed face first.

I ran back over to where Muck was standing. Muck apologized for

hurting me and explained why we shouldnt make him mad. I looked at

him and said "Well you should have told me that before." Oh well, I

then introduced Muck to Kile, and told him about the fire. After I

finished Muck looked puzzled and said "Oh so was that you I

attacked back at the fire?" I said "No it couldnt have been you, when

I was attacked it was by something much bigger." "But then, who

did I attack? I grabbed ahold of a Buizel and then he started

screaming for help." Replied Muck. Instantly I knew who he was

talking about. Jimmy. I then replied to Muck "That wasnt me, that

was Jimmy, my friend. So I guess that little guy is still alive." We

continued on when suddenly, Muck snapped. "Thats it!" Muck

screamed. Kile shouted back "Whats it?" Muck replied "The fire,

before it was started I saw a group of Zangoose standing around

near your village. They might have started the fire!! And that

would also explain your scar Icey." I then jumped up, and turned in

midair. I looked over to Muck and said "Do you know where they are

now?" Muck's happy face then dissapeared. "No, I dont." But with

this new news, we headed back to the scene of the crime. Once we

got there we looked for footprints. We did find some but they were

much larger than footprints that a Zangoose would leave. Puzzled I

sat down. I began to think, who could have done this, and why?

And where was Jimmy, is he really still alive? All of these questions

led to others and those led to even m ore questions. And as I was

sitting there I heard a "Pss" I looked up and there was Jimmy, sitting

up in the tree above me. I said "Jimmy dont move!" But it was to

late. I heard a crack and down came Jimmy. I looked at him and

shook my head at him. "When will you ever learn Jimmy?" Jimmy

shrugged his shoulders and then said "So who are your new best

friends? Huh Icey? Or should I tell them your real name?" "No Jimmy,

there is no need for that. And FYI, they arent my new best friends.

They are just helping me find out who did this to out village." I

replied. I then brought over Kile and Muck. I introduced everyone and

then we moved on. As we walked Jimmy said "You know, the dangest

thing happened to me, some stranger hit me across the butt with

some vine of somesort. I stung like crud too." Muck then began to

blush but I knew it was more than likely not best to tell Jimmy that

his new friend did that to him. We walked on and I heard an evil like

laugh. We all heard it. It began to get louder and louder and it

sounded like there were thousands of pokemon or creatures there.

We then saw about five shadows close in on us. We were surrounded!




Okay thats the end of chapter 2. I hope you liked it.
 
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