Writing My Fanfic The world of pokemon(chapter 4 Is Here!)

ashworth

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Here is my fanfic which will need characters.

Chapter 1 in the beggining
BUZZ...BUZZZ...BUZZZZ I woke up it was 7:00 in twinleaf. So i went downstairs had some breakfast and then there was a knock on the door
"hello" said Mark. I opened the door and said "hi mark"
"come on alec we've got to go find that red gyrados at lake verity" he replied
"where did you get that idea" ( i knew a lot about pokemon but nothing as bizzare as this)
Mark turned on the news "keep looking out for the red gyrados"was all that i heard before i was dragged to the lake by mark. So there we were for ten minutes but still no gyrados,then i saw a brief case. i told mark straight away and he ran into the tall grass to open it... but before he could get to it 2 starlys came charging. i jumped at the brief case and opened it inside were three pokeballs. i threw one and so did mark my pokemon was a chimchar and marks was a piplup.
"scratch" i yelled.the starly instantly fainted as did marks opponent.
Then somebody was approaching in the distance...


Dun...Dun...Dun

Chapter 2 The pokemon professor
The man was walking towards us he was quite elderly then he said to us
"Hello you two i'm professor Colin also known as the pokemon professor that is my brief case i left it here when i came to the lake.HANG ON! YOU HAVE OPENED IT AND TAKEN SOME OF MY POKEMON."
"Sorry sir it is just 2 starlys attacked us. but we have both made friends with your pokemon.By the way i'm Alec and he is Mark"
"I see... i tell you what you can keep the pokemon.But you must also come to Sandgem Town after i'm going to send you on your pokemon journey.As i have heard from your parents that they will let you go all over Sinnoh."
"AWESOME"Mark shouted
"and who knows we might just beet the pokemon league one day" I said with excitment
"ok i will see you at sandgem i suggest you say good bye to your parents." professor said walking off, bu walking off he threw us 5 poke balls each.
so i ran home to say goodbye and as soon as i walked through the door my mum gave me a huge hug and my dad handed me a poke ball
"good luck and good bye!" they both said as i walked to Sandgem.

Chapter 3 My First catch
As I approached sandgem town there was a patch of tall grass, with no fear i walked into it... then right in front of me there was an aipom
"Aipooom" it said then as i held chimchars poke ball in my hand something strange happened... a heracross came out of the poke ball dad gave me.
"COOL! A HERACROSS!"i shouted. i could not believe it dad and mum had given me a pokemon.one of my favourites.
"brick break" i shouted to heracross.it knocked the aipom down know was the perfect time to catch it.i threw a poke ball at it... 1... 2... 3... awesome i caught it but it was quite weak so i had to get it to a pokemon centre in sandgem.

Chapter 4 A Rival Appears
Eventually I arrived in sandgem, i wasn't scared tovisit a knew town,because my Grandparents lived in sandgem. So I walked into the pokemon centre and at the counter was a machine with six holes sized for pokeballs and a red haired nurse. She took my pokeballs and put them in the machine for a few seconds and said goodbye.After I came out of the pokemon centre the pokemon proffesor came up to me and said
"I,ve got something for you please follow me to my lab"
"Sure thing" I replied. So we went to the lab and he handed me a little red box.
"What is this?" I asked.
" It is a pokedex for recording pokemon you have seen and captured"He replied "Oh and there is someone i would like you to meet" He carried on.
"Who is it?" I asked
"It is your new rival... Jerry" He said at this moment a boy walked in and said with excitement "HI i'm Jerry"
"I'm Alec" I said back
"How about a battle"suggested professor Colin
"GREAT IDEA!" we both shouted.














Sorry it is in rate my dp team will change tommorow because the security on the computer is blocking it

my apologies
 
RE: My Fanfic The world of pokemon

yea your right it is in the wrong place , i think you can try to get a mod to move it , but im not sure

anyway i seem interested in this , cant wait till the next scene
 
RE: My Fanfic The world of pokemon

chapter 2 is coming!do you want to be a character

also could a mod move it for me
 
RE: My Fanfic The world of pokemon

YOU'RE SUCH A - BAD PERSON! YOU BLACKMAIL ME - THEN YOU MICKEYTAKE MY FANFIC!! MODS! MODS!
 
RE: My Fanfic The world of pokemon

What im not taking the mickey mine will be a lot different than yours and if you got that pm saying sorry and i hoped to see you on Saturday to say sorry but i guess ill have to wait until sunday!
 
RE: My Fanfic The world of pokemon

I've moved this to the proper location.

I also read through both stories, and the only similarities I could find is character input by other members and the "dun dun dun" at the end, neither of which is a crime.
 
RE: My Fanfic The world of pokemon(chapter 2 and 3 is Up!)

HE EVEN ADDED MY AIPOM AND HERACROSS! NOW APOLOGY NOT ACCEPTED!

*reports*
 
RE: My Fanfic The world of pokemon(chapter 2 and 3 is Up!)

i'm just doing my team that i'm now raising it is
Infernape ambipom Heracross Dragonite Scizor and Kingdra
you haven't worked on your fanfic for ages.
 
RE: My Fanfic The world of pokemon(chapter 2 and 3 is Up!)

Try to make your stories longer.

Character: Jerry
Pokemon: Buizel, Ponyta, Turwig
Your rival.

Just a short one. You may choose not to use my character.
 
RE: My Fanfic The world of pokemon(chapter 2 and 3 is Up!)

Ok Jerry will be my rival who i will meet in sandgem.
what is your final team?
 
RE: My Fanfic The world of pokemon(chapter 2 and 3 is Up!)

jezz....this story is so fast paced....you give no detail on the back round or how the battle with the starlys went.You are telling the story -which is fine if you are talking but when you are writing show,because you are not here we can not see the same picture that you see in your "mind's eye"

Example:Susan is clumsy

Instead:Susuan is as clumsy as an flamingo with knots in it's knees.When ever she walks she looks like a screwed up duck.
 
RE: My Fanfic The world of pokemon(chapter 2 and 3 is Up!)

ashworth said:
Ok Jerry will be my rival who i will meet in sandgem.
what is your final team?

Torterra, Floatzel, Rapidash, Staraptor, Bronzong, Abimosnow

Your stories are too fast-paced! And please use correct CAPS and puctuation. Not mini-modding by the way.
 
whoever thinks he is copying me say 'I'!

here it is:
http://pokebeach.com/forums/showthread.php?tid=25478
mine is much better detail though... XD
 
LISTEN TO ME TSC YOU ARE REALLY GETTING ON MY NERVES!
FIRST YOU CALL ME A NOOB THINKING YOU ARE AN ABSOULUTE PRO!
NEXT YOU ACCUSE ME OF STEALING YOUR FANFIC!
IT WON'T BE THE SAME!!!!!
YOU DON'T HAVE A HERACROSS IN YOUR FANFIC.
BUT STILL I WILL SORT IT OUT ON SUNDAY.
 
Using the same Pokemon as someone else isn't a crime... as long as his characters and plot are substantially different, there's no reason to report it. Get over it.
 
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