Text-Based Results
Judge: @Luispipe8
1. @Lunarwork
2. @thegrovylekid
3. @SneaselGenesis
4. @Tails
5. @Lord o da rings
6. @Professor Palutena
Lopunny - 90 HP - Fighting
Stage 1 - Evolves from Buneary
Ability: Springy Steps
When this Pokemon attacks, you may choose to attack 1 of your opponent's Benched Pokemon instead of their Active Pokemon. (Don't apply Weakness or Resistance for Benched Pokemon).
[F][F] Flop Off 30
You may switch this Pokemon with 1 of your Benched Pokemon.
[F][C][C] Charming Cry 80-
Before dealing damage, your opponent may discard as many cards from their hand as they like. For each card they discard, this attack does 10 less damage.
Weakness - [P]
Resistance -
Retreat Cost - 1
7. @ZygardeChronicles
8. @rainyman123
no fair, Marshadow isn't released yet
Creativity: 15/20
(Spectral Guard is interesting, recently this effect was only seen as Assault Vest; and the attack is an interesting version of a Knock Off attack (instead of the current effect). I actually like it.)
Wording: 11/15
(The attack should say "If your opponent’s Active Pokémon has A Pokémon Tool card attached to it" (read Yanmega STS), and then, the Ability should read "damage don to this Pokémon by attacks from your opponent’s Pokémon that have any Special Energy attached to them is reduced by 60 (after/before applying Weakness and Resistance)" (see Assault Vest).)
Believability: 13/15
(If it wasn't for that high HP, it would have been perfect. "small" legends like Marshadow usually don't go above 80HP, and add that buffer Ability, you'll have an effective 180HP Pokémon with a relatively strong attack... and that's even before FFB or Assault Vest. Sure, it's difficult to power up, but being so bulky it wouldn't be an issue to power up easily.)
At first glance the card wasn't so bad, it's just that you know something's wrong when you need to hip for 180 damage or more to OHKO something like that.
Total: 39/50
9. @John InCENAroar
10. @Niteclaw1028
11. @Vom
12. @TheFlyingPidove
13. @Adam Ryder
14. @garchompcrescent
15. @double o squirtle
16. @Vracken
17. @Little Cherrim
18. @Celever
19. @NinjaPenguin
3rd Place: Professor Palutena’s punching Lopunny, with 46/50 points.
2nd Place: double o squirtle’s burning Wormadam, with 48/50 points.
1st Place: NinjaPenguin’s Fiery Rotom, with 49/50 points.
So we come to a close! I was really surprised by the creativity from a lot of you this month. Hope to see this as a trend! So, without anything else to say, I'll see you guys in June!
Judge: @Luispipe8
1. @Lunarwork
Scizor - {R} - HP120
Stage 1- Evolves from Scyther
NO. 212- Pincer Pokémon- HT. 5'11" WT. 260.1 lbs
Ability- Metalflame Depressor
If this Pokemon were to be damaged by an attack from a {M} or {R} Pokemon,
flip a coin. If heads, damage done to this Pokemon from {M} and {R} Pokemon
is reduced by 30. If tails, this Ability does nothing. (You can't use this Ability more
than once in your turn and you can't prevent more than 90 damage in this
way.
{R}{M}- Flame Crunch - 30
Flip a coin after your attack. If heads, if this Pokemon has more than 2 {R}
Energy cards attached to it, you may search your deck for a Special Energy
card and attach it to one of your benched Pokemon. If tails, discard an Energy card attached
to this Pokémon.
{R}{C}{C} - Lightspeed Flame - 110
You may discard a Special Energy card attached to this Pokemon. If you do, search your opponent's deck for
up to 2 Trainer cards and search your deck for 2 Energy cards. You may switch the effects of those cards and
shuffle your deck afterwards.
Weakness- {W} x2
Resistance- {P} -20
Retreat- {C}
This Pokémon's pincers, which contain steel, can crush any hard object
it gets ahold of into bits.
Stage 1- Evolves from Scyther
NO. 212- Pincer Pokémon- HT. 5'11" WT. 260.1 lbs
Ability- Metalflame Depressor
If this Pokemon were to be damaged by an attack from a {M} or {R} Pokemon,
flip a coin. If heads, damage done to this Pokemon from {M} and {R} Pokemon
is reduced by 30. If tails, this Ability does nothing. (You can't use this Ability more
than once in your turn and you can't prevent more than 90 damage in this
way.
{R}{M}- Flame Crunch - 30
Flip a coin after your attack. If heads, if this Pokemon has more than 2 {R}
Energy cards attached to it, you may search your deck for a Special Energy
card and attach it to one of your benched Pokemon. If tails, discard an Energy card attached
to this Pokémon.
{R}{C}{C} - Lightspeed Flame - 110
You may discard a Special Energy card attached to this Pokemon. If you do, search your opponent's deck for
up to 2 Trainer cards and search your deck for 2 Energy cards. You may switch the effects of those cards and
shuffle your deck afterwards.
Weakness- {W} x2
Resistance- {P} -20
Retreat- {C}
This Pokémon's pincers, which contain steel, can crush any hard object
it gets ahold of into bits.
Ever heard the phrase "don't run with scissors"?
Creativity: 17/20
(I do think the card is sorta creative... but honestly, it's just a bunch of stuff mashed-up together, which makes almost no sense.)
Wording: 0/15
(The Abiity simply makes no sense. You receive damage from opponent's attacks during their turn; but you say you can't use this once during YOUR turn? Besides, to specify one-use abilities it's simply said "once doring your turn". And on top of that, how on earth can you deny more than 30 to even add that last sentence? On the first attack, the "after your attack" is unnecessary. And the last attack is poorly worded and you don't even shuffle your opponent's deck. And the last points you might've had go away from various punctuation and parenthesis errors.)
Believability: 0/15
(As I said above, the Ability literally makes no sense as it stands right now. None at all. And Lightspeed Flame's effect is simply absurd; there's no way for something like that ever happening; specially since you run several copies of a lot of cards, so a lot of loopholes can be abused. Just no.)
Edit Penalty: -2pts
Well... I think I said enough already.
Total: 15/50
Creativity: 17/20
(I do think the card is sorta creative... but honestly, it's just a bunch of stuff mashed-up together, which makes almost no sense.)
Wording: 0/15
(The Abiity simply makes no sense. You receive damage from opponent's attacks during their turn; but you say you can't use this once during YOUR turn? Besides, to specify one-use abilities it's simply said "once doring your turn". And on top of that, how on earth can you deny more than 30 to even add that last sentence? On the first attack, the "after your attack" is unnecessary. And the last attack is poorly worded and you don't even shuffle your opponent's deck. And the last points you might've had go away from various punctuation and parenthesis errors.)
Believability: 0/15
(As I said above, the Ability literally makes no sense as it stands right now. None at all. And Lightspeed Flame's effect is simply absurd; there's no way for something like that ever happening; specially since you run several copies of a lot of cards, so a lot of loopholes can be abused. Just no.)
Edit Penalty: -2pts
Well... I think I said enough already.
Total: 15/50
2. @thegrovylekid
Illumise HP: 70 [P]
Basic
No: 314 Firefly Pokémon HT: 2'00" WT: 39.0 lbs
Poké-POWER: Scent Guidance
Once During your Turn, when you put Illumise from your hand onto your Bench, you may search your deck for Volbeat and put it onto your bench. Shuffle your deck afterward.
[P] Light Show 20+
Does 10 more damage for each Volbeat on your Bench.
Weakness: [R] +20
Resistance:
Retreat: [C]
Basic
No: 314 Firefly Pokémon HT: 2'00" WT: 39.0 lbs
Poké-POWER: Scent Guidance
Once During your Turn, when you put Illumise from your hand onto your Bench, you may search your deck for Volbeat and put it onto your bench. Shuffle your deck afterward.
[P] Light Show 20+
Does 10 more damage for each Volbeat on your Bench.
Weakness: [R] +20
Resistance:
Retreat: [C]
Just your regular Illumise, it seems.
Creativity: 15/20
(Scent Guidance is cool, though nothing we haven't seen before; and Light Show is just a reworded version of almost every Nidoking+Nidoqueen attack)
Wording: 13/15
(Why did you capitalize Turn...? And also, the wording on Illumise's attack should read: "Does 20 damage plus 10 more damage for each Volbeat on your bench". )
Believability: 13/15
(No Level or Dex Entry. Thought you learned the lesson. xD)
And indeed, it was actually rather... average? idk, it didn't really stand out.
Total: 41/50
Creativity: 15/20
(Scent Guidance is cool, though nothing we haven't seen before; and Light Show is just a reworded version of almost every Nidoking+Nidoqueen attack
)Wording: 13/15
(Why did you capitalize Turn...? And also, the wording on Illumise's attack should read: "Does 20 damage plus 10 more damage for each Volbeat on your bench". )
Believability: 13/15
(No Level or Dex Entry. Thought you learned the lesson. xD)
And indeed, it was actually rather... average? idk, it didn't really stand out.
Total: 41/50
3. @SneaselGenesis
Snorlax – d Delta Species – HP130 – Darkness
Basic Pokémon
NO. 143 Sleeping Pokémon HT: 6'11" WT: 1014.1 lbs.
Ability: Ardent Eater
If this Pokémon is your Active Pokémon, whenever your opponent draws 1 or more cards, draw a card.
[D][D][C][C] Large and In Charge 30+
This attack does 10 more damage for each card in your hand.
Weakness - Fighting (x2)
Resistance - N/A
Retreat Cost - [C][C][C][C]
Will eat anything, even if the food happens to be a little moldy. It never gets an upset stomach.
Basic Pokémon
NO. 143 Sleeping Pokémon HT: 6'11" WT: 1014.1 lbs.
Ability: Ardent Eater
If this Pokémon is your Active Pokémon, whenever your opponent draws 1 or more cards, draw a card.
[D][D][C][C] Large and In Charge 30+
This attack does 10 more damage for each card in your hand.
Weakness - Fighting (x2)
Resistance - N/A
Retreat Cost - [C][C][C][C]
Will eat anything, even if the food happens to be a little moldy. It never gets an upset stomach.
After running so many VGC tournaments I'm starting to hate this big fella :c
Creativity: 15/20
(Ardent Eater is actually interesting, I like it. Large and In Charge is a c/p of Metagross AOR's Machine Gun Stomp, though, so not really that creative.)
Wording: 15/15
(Perfect, moving on.)
Believability: 13/15
(This card is actually not that bad, I mean, the attack is horrendously awful to power up; but the Ability can be clutch while not being that OP. Literal draw effects aren't that busted; the only thing that worries me is like a Hala or Colress from your opponent, whick can get you a LOT of cards. Maybe excluding Supporters would fix the issue.)
Well, it wasn't that bad... now let me stay away from Snorlax until I see 30 of 'em in my MSS :C
Total: 43/50
Creativity: 15/20
(Ardent Eater is actually interesting, I like it. Large and In Charge is a c/p of Metagross AOR's Machine Gun Stomp, though, so not really that creative.)
Wording: 15/15
(Perfect, moving on.)
Believability: 13/15
(This card is actually not that bad, I mean, the attack is horrendously awful to power up; but the Ability can be clutch while not being that OP. Literal draw effects aren't that busted; the only thing that worries me is like a Hala or Colress from your opponent, whick can get you a LOT of cards. Maybe excluding Supporters would fix the issue.)
Well, it wasn't that bad... now let me stay away from Snorlax until I see 30 of 'em in my MSS :C
Total: 43/50
4. @Tails
Comfey d (Delta Species) HP: 90 [G]
Basic Pokemon
Ability: Flower Present
Once during your turn, you may heal 20 damage from one of your [G]-type Pokemon
[G] Posy Pickin' 20
Attach 1 Basic Energy from your Discard Pile onto one of your Pokemon in any way you like
[G][G][C] Lei it on the Line 50
If the opposing Pokemon is an EX or GX card; you can have this attack power be doubled. If so, Comfey does 30 damage to itself
Weakness- [R] x2
Resistance-
Retreat Cost- [C]
"Baths prepared with the flowers from its vine have a relaxing effect, so this Pokémon is a hit with many people."
Basic Pokemon
Ability: Flower Present
Once during your turn, you may heal 20 damage from one of your [G]-type Pokemon
[G] Posy Pickin' 20
Attach 1 Basic Energy from your Discard Pile onto one of your Pokemon in any way you like
[G][G][C] Lei it on the Line 50
If the opposing Pokemon is an EX or GX card; you can have this attack power be doubled. If so, Comfey does 30 damage to itself
Weakness- [R] x2
Resistance-
Retreat Cost- [C]
"Baths prepared with the flowers from its vine have a relaxing effect, so this Pokémon is a hit with many people."
I always wondered who thought a necklace Pokémon would be a nice idea...
Creativity: 13/20
(Interesting effects overall, though we've seen them already in a lot of cards.)
Wording: 7/15
(G-type is unnecessary, just G; in Posy Pickin' is "to" instead of "onto"; and "in any way you like" is specifically for multiple attachments. In the last attack, it should read "If your opponent's Active Pokémon is a Pokémon-GX or a Pokémon-EX" (read Golisopod GRI), and then the attack should follow "you may do 50 more damage. If you do, *this Pokémon* does 30 damage to itself". Finally, accented é's in Pokémon.)
Believability: 13/15
(The card in terms of balance is actually good, it's a glass cannon that doesn't even do that much damage and it's hard to power up, so we're good there. I'm deducting points first because you missed the Dex stats (HT, WT, Dex N°), and then because Delta Species Pokémon kept their original Weakness and Resistance; so Comfey would be weak to Metal and resist Darkness.)
I guess the card wasn't bad, just work on the effects a little bit more.
Total: 35/50
Creativity: 13/20
(Interesting effects overall, though we've seen them already in a lot of cards.)
Wording: 7/15
(G-type is unnecessary, just G; in Posy Pickin' is "to" instead of "onto"; and "in any way you like" is specifically for multiple attachments. In the last attack, it should read "If your opponent's Active Pokémon is a Pokémon-GX or a Pokémon-EX" (read Golisopod GRI), and then the attack should follow "you may do 50 more damage. If you do, *this Pokémon* does 30 damage to itself". Finally, accented é's in Pokémon.)
Believability: 13/15
(The card in terms of balance is actually good, it's a glass cannon that doesn't even do that much damage and it's hard to power up, so we're good there. I'm deducting points first because you missed the Dex stats (HT, WT, Dex N°), and then because Delta Species Pokémon kept their original Weakness and Resistance; so Comfey would be weak to Metal and resist Darkness.)
I guess the card wasn't bad, just work on the effects a little bit more.
Total: 35/50
5. @Lord o da rings
Morelull HP: 60 - Psychic
Basic Pokémon
[P] Lavender Spores
Flip a coin. If heads, your opponent's active Pokémon is now Asleep. If tails, your opponent's active Pokémon is now Confused.
[P][C] Spore Scatter
This attack does 20 damage to 2 of your opponent's Benched Pokémon. (Don't apply Weakness and Resistance for Benched Pokémon.)
Weakness: [D] x2
Resistance: None
Retreat: [C]
Pokédex: It scatters spores that flicker and glow. Anyone seeing these lights falls into a deep slumber.
Basic Pokémon
[P] Lavender Spores
Flip a coin. If heads, your opponent's active Pokémon is now Asleep. If tails, your opponent's active Pokémon is now Confused.
[P][C] Spore Scatter
This attack does 20 damage to 2 of your opponent's Benched Pokémon. (Don't apply Weakness and Resistance for Benched Pokémon.)
Weakness: [D] x2
Resistance: None
Retreat: [C]
Pokédex: It scatters spores that flicker and glow. Anyone seeing these lights falls into a deep slumber.
Achoo! Uhm, sorry, my allergies, too many spores in the ai-chooo..!
Creativity: 15/20
(Lavender Spores is cool, but that's really all the card has, an auto status.)
Wording: 14/15
(First, Active goes Capitalized. And last, there's nothing else. xD)
Believability: 14/15
(Well, as I said above, Lavender Spores was really all it had, and it's not abusable... The point, though, is for missing Dex Stats.)
Edit Penalty: -2pts
I guess you could have put a little bit more work into the card, but in the end it turned out fine overall... but ugh... I really need to work on my allergies... any suggestions?
Total: 42/50
Creativity: 15/20
(Lavender Spores is cool, but that's really all the card has, an auto status.)
Wording: 14/15
(First, Active goes Capitalized. And last, there's nothing else. xD)
Believability: 14/15
(Well, as I said above, Lavender Spores was really all it had, and it's not abusable... The point, though, is for missing Dex Stats.)
Edit Penalty: -2pts
I guess you could have put a little bit more work into the card, but in the end it turned out fine overall... but ugh... I really need to work on my allergies... any suggestions?
Total: 42/50
6. @Professor Palutena
Lopunny - 90 HP - Fighting
Stage 1 - Evolves from Buneary
Ability: Springy Steps
When this Pokemon attacks, you may choose to attack 1 of your opponent's Benched Pokemon instead of their Active Pokemon. (Don't apply Weakness or Resistance for Benched Pokemon).
[F][F] Flop Off 30
You may switch this Pokemon with 1 of your Benched Pokemon.
[F][C][C] Charming Cry 80-
Before dealing damage, your opponent may discard as many cards from their hand as they like. For each card they discard, this attack does 10 less damage.
Weakness - [P]
Resistance -
Retreat Cost - 1
Funny to see a Fighting Lopunny, since its Mega is actually Fighting
Creativity: 19/20
(Wow, both Springy Steps and Charming Cry are amazingly well thought effects! Flop off is average at best, but the other effects surely makes up for it.)
Wording: 14/15
(One single thing... Accented é's... Charming Cry is a new effect for the era, so that wording would be acceptable.)
Believability: 13/15
(First, two points for missing Dex Info and Data. And lastly, a congratulation for a balanced card. Really, the Ability isn't that abusable and the 80dmge snipe can be reduced, so it's not that bad.)
So, this was a really nice card, Prof! Little details could have awarded you a better score, but it's great nonetheless!
Total: 46/50
Creativity: 19/20
(Wow, both Springy Steps and Charming Cry are amazingly well thought effects! Flop off is average at best, but the other effects surely makes up for it.)
Wording: 14/15
(One single thing... Accented é's... Charming Cry is a new effect for the era, so that wording would be acceptable.)
Believability: 13/15
(First, two points for missing Dex Info and Data. And lastly, a congratulation for a balanced card. Really, the Ability isn't that abusable and the 80dmge snipe can be reduced, so it's not that bad.)
So, this was a really nice card, Prof! Little details could have awarded you a better score, but it's great nonetheless!
Total: 46/50
7. @ZygardeChronicles
MEGA-Evolves from Charizard-EX-Dark-HP230
When 1 of your Pokémon becomes a Mega Evolution Pokémon, your turn ends.
[D][C] Night Wing Strike 20x Damage
This attack does 20 damage times the amount of [D] Energy attached to all Pokémon.
When a Pokémon-EX has been Knocked Out, your opponent takes 2 Prize cards.
Weakness: [F] x2
Resistance: [P] -20
Retreat: [C][C]
When 1 of your Pokémon becomes a Mega Evolution Pokémon, your turn ends.
[D][C] Night Wing Strike 20x Damage
This attack does 20 damage times the amount of [D] Energy attached to all Pokémon.
When a Pokémon-EX has been Knocked Out, your opponent takes 2 Prize cards.
Weakness: [F] x2
Resistance: [P] -20
Retreat: [C][C]
Of course, there had to be a Dark-type Char, so predictive... xD
Creativity: 12/20
(The attack is like a mixture between Delphox FCO and Darkrai-EX BKP, which is interesting... but that's about it. Sadly enough, there's not much room for creativity when it comes to Mega Evolutions.)
Wording: 14/15
(Everything's fine, just that the "damage" after the "20x" is not supposed to be there.)
Believability: 15/15
(It looks balanced, I mean, it's a cheaper and more powerful version of Darkrai-EX BKP, but you'd need to Mega Evolve it, which is slower; and the only case the damage cna go astronomically high is in a mirror match or against said Darkrai. It's well balanced, overall.)
Poor M-Charizard needed maybe something else to bring it to a higher score; but that's the problem with Megas. Regardless, everything else was just fine!
Total: 41/50
Creativity: 12/20
(The attack is like a mixture between Delphox FCO and Darkrai-EX BKP, which is interesting... but that's about it. Sadly enough, there's not much room for creativity when it comes to Mega Evolutions.)
Wording: 14/15
(Everything's fine, just that the "damage" after the "20x" is not supposed to be there.)
Believability: 15/15
(It looks balanced, I mean, it's a cheaper and more powerful version of Darkrai-EX BKP, but you'd need to Mega Evolve it, which is slower; and the only case the damage cna go astronomically high is in a mirror match or against said Darkrai. It's well balanced, overall.)
Poor M-Charizard needed maybe something else to bring it to a higher score; but that's the problem with Megas. Regardless, everything else was just fine!
Total: 41/50
8. @rainyman123
Marshadow HP 120 Metal
Basic Pokémon
/Ability/ - Spectral Guard
Prevent 60 damage done to this Pokémon by your opponent's Pokémon with any Special Energy attached to them.
[M][M][M] Unyielding Strike 70+
If the Defending Pokémon has any Tool cards attached to it, this attack does 80 more damage and discard all Pokémon Tool cards attached to the Defending Pokémon.
Weakness: Fire x2
Resistance: Psychic -20
Retreat: 2
Basic Pokémon
/Ability/ - Spectral Guard
Prevent 60 damage done to this Pokémon by your opponent's Pokémon with any Special Energy attached to them.
[M][M][M] Unyielding Strike 70+
If the Defending Pokémon has any Tool cards attached to it, this attack does 80 more damage and discard all Pokémon Tool cards attached to the Defending Pokémon.
Weakness: Fire x2
Resistance: Psychic -20
Retreat: 2
Creativity: 15/20
(Spectral Guard is interesting, recently this effect was only seen as Assault Vest; and the attack is an interesting version of a Knock Off attack (instead of the current effect). I actually like it.)
Wording: 11/15
(The attack should say "If your opponent’s Active Pokémon has A Pokémon Tool card attached to it" (read Yanmega STS), and then, the Ability should read "damage don to this Pokémon by attacks from your opponent’s Pokémon that have any Special Energy attached to them is reduced by 60 (after/before applying Weakness and Resistance)" (see Assault Vest).)
Believability: 13/15
(If it wasn't for that high HP, it would have been perfect. "small" legends like Marshadow usually don't go above 80HP, and add that buffer Ability, you'll have an effective 180HP Pokémon with a relatively strong attack... and that's even before FFB or Assault Vest. Sure, it's difficult to power up, but being so bulky it wouldn't be an issue to power up easily.)
At first glance the card wasn't so bad, it's just that you know something's wrong when you need to hip for 180 damage or more to OHKO something like that.
Total: 39/50
9. @John InCENAroar
Kecleon GX - [G] - HP 150
Ability: Adaptability
Whenever you attach a basic energy to this pokemon, in becomes that type in addition to it’s other type(s)
[C][C][C] Feeble Licking: 60 damage; During your next turn, your opponent’s pokemon have a weakness to this pokemon’s type(s) (This cannot result in anything more than a x2 weakness.)
[C][C] Blend-In GX: 60x damage; This attack does 60 damage for each of this Pokemon’s types. (You can’t use more than 1 GX attack per game.)
Weakness: None
Resistance: None
Retreat: 1
Ability: Adaptability
Whenever you attach a basic energy to this pokemon, in becomes that type in addition to it’s other type(s)
[C][C][C] Feeble Licking: 60 damage; During your next turn, your opponent’s pokemon have a weakness to this pokemon’s type(s) (This cannot result in anything more than a x2 weakness.)
[C][C] Blend-In GX: 60x damage; This attack does 60 damage for each of this Pokemon’s types. (You can’t use more than 1 GX attack per game.)
Weakness: None
Resistance: None
Retreat: 1
Well, I'm getting dizzy; I don't know if it's the Kecleon or my cat going around like crazy...
Creativity: 17/20
(I gotta give you that, you played with Kekleon pretty nicely. All the effects are rather interesting (although poorly worded).)
Wording: 5/15
(Adaptability should be written "Whenever you attach a Basic Energy to this Pokémon, it becomes the same type as that Energy in addition to its existing types" (Read Eevee SM and Flareon AOR), but you forgot to add a time frame. How long does this effect lasts? Then the first attack is poorly written and again, falls into the Ability's loophole, so it's not rewordable. And then Blend In does it again; besides writing the GX attack clause wrong, "You can't use more than 1 GX attack in a game.". Finally, accented "é"s.)
Believability: 7/15
(The way you wrote all of that makes it impossible to be developed and a real hassle to make it work properly without a whole rulebook just for this Pokémon.)
The creative thinking wasn't bad; it's just that you mixed an overly complicated mechanic with a poor way of writing to get yourself a chameleon soup.
Total: 29/50
Creativity: 17/20
(I gotta give you that, you played with Kekleon pretty nicely. All the effects are rather interesting (although poorly worded).)
Wording: 5/15
(Adaptability should be written "Whenever you attach a Basic Energy to this Pokémon, it becomes the same type as that Energy in addition to its existing types" (Read Eevee SM and Flareon AOR), but you forgot to add a time frame. How long does this effect lasts? Then the first attack is poorly written and again, falls into the Ability's loophole, so it's not rewordable. And then Blend In does it again; besides writing the GX attack clause wrong, "You can't use more than 1 GX attack in a game.". Finally, accented "é"s.)
Believability: 7/15
(The way you wrote all of that makes it impossible to be developed and a real hassle to make it work properly without a whole rulebook just for this Pokémon.)
The creative thinking wasn't bad; it's just that you mixed an overly complicated mechanic with a poor way of writing to get yourself a chameleon soup.
Total: 29/50
10. @Niteclaw1028
Milotic-GX – [Y] – HP220
Stage 1 – Evolves from Feebas
Ability: Fairy Veil
While this Pokemon is in play, prevent all damage done through effects or Special Conditions to your Pokemon.
[Y][Y][C] Healing Splash 60
If this Pokemon has any Special Energy attached to it, heal 30 damage from each of your Pokemon.
[Y][Y][C] Healing Wave GX 150
Heal 100 damage from each of your Pokemon.
Weakness: Metal (x2)
Resistance: Dark (-20)
Retreat: [C] [C] [C]
It lives at the bottom of clear lakes. In times of war, it shows itself, which soothes people's minds and hearts.
Stage 1 – Evolves from Feebas
Ability: Fairy Veil
While this Pokemon is in play, prevent all damage done through effects or Special Conditions to your Pokemon.
[Y][Y][C] Healing Splash 60
If this Pokemon has any Special Energy attached to it, heal 30 damage from each of your Pokemon.
[Y][Y][C] Healing Wave GX 150
Heal 100 damage from each of your Pokemon.
Weakness: Metal (x2)
Resistance: Dark (-20)
Retreat: [C] [C] [C]
It lives at the bottom of clear lakes. In times of war, it shows itself, which soothes people's minds and hearts.
Wait, wasn't Milotic a Fairy-type already...? :v
Creativity: 16/20
(The Ability is interesting, to be honest. Healing Splash is alright. Healing Wave is relatively simple.)
Wording: 13/15
(First, the "While this Pokémon is in play" is only used for effects that could directly affect the Pokémon while not in play (for example, to prevent a Korrina from searching for a Golurk AOR). The rest is an acceptable wording. You just forgot to accent the "é" in Pokémon, though.)
Believability: 12/15
(I don't really see an issue with this card from balancing. There are a few card errors, though, like the missing GX Clause and GX Rule; as well as adding a Dex Entry to a GX Pokémon.)
This card was honestly better than I thought it would. Nice job, keep it up!
Total: 41/50
Creativity: 16/20
(The Ability is interesting, to be honest. Healing Splash is alright. Healing Wave is relatively simple.)
Wording: 13/15
(First, the "While this Pokémon is in play" is only used for effects that could directly affect the Pokémon while not in play (for example, to prevent a Korrina from searching for a Golurk AOR). The rest is an acceptable wording. You just forgot to accent the "é" in Pokémon, though.)
Believability: 12/15
(I don't really see an issue with this card from balancing. There are a few card errors, though, like the missing GX Clause and GX Rule; as well as adding a Dex Entry to a GX Pokémon.)
This card was honestly better than I thought it would.
Nice job, keep it up!Total: 41/50
11. @Vom
[Stage 2] Garchomp HP140 [W]
Evolves from Gabite
Hunting Instincts
When you play this Pokémon from your hand to evolve 1 of your Pokémon during your turn, you may switch this Pokémon with your Active Pokémon. If you do, switch 1 of your opponent's Benched Pokémon with his or her Active Pokémon, also this Pokémon's attacks do 30 more damage during this turn.
[W][W][F] Dragon Tail 120
If the Defending Pokémon isn't Knocked Out by damage from this attack and your opponent has at least 2 Benched Pokémon, you may shuffle 1 of your opponent's Pokémon and all cards attached to it into your opponent's deck. (You can't choose a Pokémon from your opponent's Discard pile.)
Weakness: [Y]x2
Resistance: None
Retreat Cost: [C][C]
The protuberances on its head serve as sensors. It can even detect distant prey.
Evolves from Gabite
When you play this Pokémon from your hand to evolve 1 of your Pokémon during your turn, you may switch this Pokémon with your Active Pokémon. If you do, switch 1 of your opponent's Benched Pokémon with his or her Active Pokémon, also this Pokémon's attacks do 30 more damage during this turn.
[W][W][F] Dragon Tail 120
If the Defending Pokémon isn't Knocked Out by damage from this attack and your opponent has at least 2 Benched Pokémon, you may shuffle 1 of your opponent's Pokémon and all cards attached to it into your opponent's deck. (You can't choose a Pokémon from your opponent's Discard pile.)
Weakness: [Y]x2
Resistance: None
Retreat Cost: [C][C]
The protuberances on its head serve as sensors. It can even detect distant prey.
And again with the shiny Garchomps... what? not shiny? damn, I need to get my eyes checked :v
Creativity: 15/20
(I like Hunting Instincts, is a gust effect but with a plus; and Dragon Tail has an effect really akin to that of the games... or sorta. I don't see a Pokémon on the team returning to the PC. xD But it's close enough.)
Wording: 12/15
(First of all, the "his or her" was replaced by "their" in SM. Then, that also should be an "and". Dragon Tail is overall, nicely worded, but that last sentence has me thinking... why on earth would you include that...? And I still am.)
Believability: 12/15
(First, Dex Stats aren't there. Then, in terms of balance, I find it alright, since the attack's damage isn't that big... but the effect is more complicated, but given you literally can't use that as a Win Con, it's not as bad as you'd think at first; although it is strong.)
So, may I suggest you take your Garchomp to a camping trip? IDK, could work on those instincts better. :T
Total: 39/50
Creativity: 15/20
(I like Hunting Instincts, is a gust effect but with a plus; and Dragon Tail has an effect really akin to that of the games... or sorta. I don't see a Pokémon on the team returning to the PC. xD But it's close enough.)
Wording: 12/15
(First of all, the "his or her" was replaced by "their" in SM. Then, that also should be an "and". Dragon Tail is overall, nicely worded, but that last sentence has me thinking... why on earth would you include that...? And I still am.)
Believability: 12/15
(First, Dex Stats aren't there. Then, in terms of balance, I find it alright, since the attack's damage isn't that big... but the effect is more complicated, but given you literally can't use that as a Win Con, it's not as bad as you'd think at first; although it is strong.)
So, may I suggest you take your Garchomp to a camping trip? IDK, could work on those instincts better. :T
Total: 39/50
12. @TheFlyingPidove
Leavanny / HP: 120 / Lightning
~ Stage 2 | Evolves from Swadloon
[Ability] Storming Swarm
Once during your turn (before you attack), you may search your deck for a Basic [L] Pokémon, reveal it, and put it into your hand. Shuffle your deck afterward.
[L] String Charge [20]
Switch this Pokémon with 1 of your Benched [L] Pokémon. Attach up to 2 [L] Energy cards from your discard pile to your new Active Pokémon.
Weakness: [F] x2
Resistance: [M] -20
Retreat Cost: [C]
[Ability] Storming Swarm
Once during your turn (before you attack), you may search your deck for a Basic [L] Pokémon, reveal it, and put it into your hand. Shuffle your deck afterward.
[L] String Charge [20]
Switch this Pokémon with 1 of your Benched [L] Pokémon. Attach up to 2 [L] Energy cards from your discard pile to your new Active Pokémon.
Weakness: [F] x2
Resistance: [M] -20
Retreat Cost: [C]
Poor Leavanny, I wonder when it'll be played...
Creativity: 18/20
(I like this card a lot, the Ability is fitting; and the attack is very very good. Nice job!)
Wording: 14/15
(The only mistake would be "Before YOUR attack".)
Believability: 13/15
(The card in terms of Balance is actually good. Even though you could use FoGP to get a T1 Leavanny, the Ability is not abusable, and the attack isn't that worth the setup, might as well use MegaMan instead. You're lacking Dex Entry and Stats, though.)
Honestly I was surprised by how good this card did, TFP. Nicely done!
Total: 45/50
Creativity: 18/20
(I like this card a lot, the Ability is fitting; and the attack is very very good. Nice job!)
Wording: 14/15
(The only mistake would be "Before YOUR attack".)
Believability: 13/15
(The card in terms of Balance is actually good. Even though you could use FoGP to get a T1 Leavanny, the Ability is not abusable, and the attack isn't that worth the setup, might as well use MegaMan instead. You're lacking Dex Entry and Stats, though.)
Honestly I was surprised by how good this card did, TFP. Nicely done!
Total: 45/50
13. @Adam Ryder
Donphan - Metal - HP130
Stage 1 - Evolves from Phanpy
Ability: Coat of Arms
Prevent all damage done to this Pokémon by attacks from your opponent’s Basic Pokemon.
[M][M] Bulldoze 40
[F][F][F] Rollout 30+
This attack does 30 more damage for each [C] in your opponent’s active Pokémon’s retreat cost.
Weakness: [W]x2 Resistance: [L]-20 Retreat Cost: [C][C][C][C]
Donphan's favorite attack is curling its body into a ball, then charging at its foe while rolling at high speed. Once it starts rolling, this Pokémon can't stop very easily.
Stage 1 - Evolves from Phanpy
Ability: Coat of Arms
Prevent all damage done to this Pokémon by attacks from your opponent’s Basic Pokemon.
[M][M] Bulldoze 40
[F][F][F] Rollout 30+
This attack does 30 more damage for each [C] in your opponent’s active Pokémon’s retreat cost.
Weakness: [W]x2 Resistance: [L]-20 Retreat Cost: [C][C][C][C]
Donphan's favorite attack is curling its body into a ball, then charging at its foe while rolling at high speed. Once it starts rolling, this Pokémon can't stop very easily.
Let's get this rolling! ... ... ... got it? Rolling? No? Okay...
Creativity: 10/20
(Coat of arms is nice, but recycled from Pyroar FLF; Bulldoze is plain vanilla and Rollout is sorta cool, that one is a bit better.)
Wording: 14/15
(You lack the accented é in Pokémon, but that'd be it. )
Believability: 14/15
(The card balance is nice, I mean, it's almost too underpowered given how much setup you'd need and the low damage output. However, you missed the Dex Stats.)
The execution was great, my friend; but creativity might need some more work for next time.
Total: 38/50
Creativity: 10/20
(Coat of arms is nice, but recycled from Pyroar FLF; Bulldoze is plain vanilla and Rollout is sorta cool, that one is a bit better.)
Wording: 14/15
(You lack the accented é in Pokémon, but that'd be it. )
Believability: 14/15
(The card balance is nice, I mean, it's almost too underpowered given how much setup you'd need and the low damage output. However, you missed the Dex Stats.)
The execution was great, my friend; but creativity might need some more work for next time.
Total: 38/50
14. @garchompcrescent
Mimikyu GX [L] - HP180
Basic
#778 - Disguise Pokémon - 0'08" 1.5lbs
Ability: Mimichu
This Pokémon can use the attacks of all of your Pokémon in play with 'Pichu', 'Pikachu', or 'Raichu' in their name. (You still need the necessary Energy to use each attack.)
[C] [C] Fake thunderbolt: 20+
If Pikachu is on your Bench, this attack does 20 more damage. If Raichu is on your Bench, this attack does 20 more damage. You may discard as many [L] Energy attached to this Pokémon as you like. This attack does 10 more damage for each Energy discarded in this way.
[L] Mimi-charge GX
Search your deck for a number of [L] Energy up to the number of Pokémon you have in play with 'Pichu', Pikachu', or 'Raichu' in their name and attach them to your Mimikyu GX in any way you like. (you can't use more than one GX attack in a game.)
Weakness: [F]X2 Resistance: [M]-20 Retreat: [C]
A lonely Pokémon, it conceals its terrifying appearance beneath an old rag so it can get closer to people and other Pokémon. If its neck is broken or its rag torn during an attack, it works through the night to patch it.
Basic
#778 - Disguise Pokémon - 0'08" 1.5lbs
Ability: Mimichu
This Pokémon can use the attacks of all of your Pokémon in play with 'Pichu', 'Pikachu', or 'Raichu' in their name. (You still need the necessary Energy to use each attack.)
[C] [C] Fake thunderbolt: 20+
If Pikachu is on your Bench, this attack does 20 more damage. If Raichu is on your Bench, this attack does 20 more damage. You may discard as many [L] Energy attached to this Pokémon as you like. This attack does 10 more damage for each Energy discarded in this way.
[L] Mimi-charge GX
Search your deck for a number of [L] Energy up to the number of Pokémon you have in play with 'Pichu', Pikachu', or 'Raichu' in their name and attach them to your Mimikyu GX in any way you like. (you can't use more than one GX attack in a game.)
Weakness: [F]X2 Resistance: [M]-20 Retreat: [C]
A lonely Pokémon, it conceals its terrifying appearance beneath an old rag so it can get closer to people and other Pokémon. If its neck is broken or its rag torn during an attack, it works through the night to patch it.
So we have Pikachu... and Mimichu! Let's see..
Creativity: 20/20
(Simply marvelous. No other words. Mimichu is really well thought; Fake Thunderbolt is amazing and Mimi-Charge is also very original. Way to add the Pika essence!)
Wording: 14/15
(Would you believe me if I told you your only mistake was to write "one" instead of "1" in the GX Attack clause...?)
Believability: 12/15
(First of all, you added Dex Stats & Info on a GX, which isn't seen at all; and then you didn't put in the GX Rule. But in terms of Balance you're looking pretty good!)
Edit Penalty: -2pts
Oh, joly, I was actually looking forward to this card! You would have done way better without that Penalty, such a shame. :c Look out better for next time!
Total: 44/50
Creativity: 20/20
(Simply marvelous. No other words. Mimichu is really well thought; Fake Thunderbolt is amazing and Mimi-Charge is also very original. Way to add the Pika essence!)
Wording: 14/15
(Would you believe me if I told you your only mistake was to write "one" instead of "1" in the GX Attack clause...?)
Believability: 12/15
(First of all, you added Dex Stats & Info on a GX, which isn't seen at all; and then you didn't put in the GX Rule. But in terms of Balance you're looking pretty good!)
Edit Penalty: -2pts
Oh, joly, I was actually looking forward to this card! You would have done way better without that Penalty, such a shame. :c Look out better for next time!
Total: 44/50
15. @double o squirtle
Wormadam (Trash Cloak) Stage 1 HP: 100 [R] (Evolves from Burmy)
NO. 413 / Bagworm Pokémon / HT: 1’8” / WT 14.3 lbs.
Ability: Trash Gathering
During your turn (before you attack) you may attach up to 5 Item cards from your hand to this Pokémon. This Pokémon gets +10 HP for each Item card you attach. Discard all cards attached in this way at the end of your opponent’s next turn.
[R][R][C] Self Incineration 90+
This Pokémon does 20 damage to itself. You may discard up to 5 Item cards attached to this Pokémon. This attack does 10 more damage for each Item card you discard.
When evolving, its body takes in surrounding materials. As a result, there are many body variations.
Weakness: [W] x2 / Resistance: [G] -20 / Retreat: [C][C]
NO. 413 / Bagworm Pokémon / HT: 1’8” / WT 14.3 lbs.
Ability: Trash Gathering
During your turn (before you attack) you may attach up to 5 Item cards from your hand to this Pokémon. This Pokémon gets +10 HP for each Item card you attach. Discard all cards attached in this way at the end of your opponent’s next turn.
[R][R][C] Self Incineration 90+
This Pokémon does 20 damage to itself. You may discard up to 5 Item cards attached to this Pokémon. This attack does 10 more damage for each Item card you discard.
When evolving, its body takes in surrounding materials. As a result, there are many body variations.
Weakness: [W] x2 / Resistance: [G] -20 / Retreat: [C][C]
So we keep getting garbage in here, apparently... xD
Creativity: 20/20
(Trash Gathering's effect is really interesting, attaching multiple item cards with no added effects from the items themselves; the attack is also cool and I really like the synergy between both. Excellent!)
Wording: 13/15
(The attack should say "Item card discarded in this way" (see Genesect-EX FCO). Then I was gonna say that you forgot the "Once" in the Ability; but given you might actually attach during your whole turn, you found a loophole. But being like that, you'd definitely need some rewording so it'd say "this Pokémon can have up to 5 Items attached to it. At the end of your opponent's turn, if this Pokémon has any Item card attached, discard them." Not exact wording (I believe there's something I'm missing), but something along those lines; so the deduction is there, either way.)
Believability: 15/15
(Balance is actually really nice, the damage output is really balanced and there'll be a point where you simply don't have Items left; apart that you'd have to think between keeping those for the HP or to boost the attacks damage. Good!)
Wowsa, I dodn't expect this card to be this good! You did an amazing job, dos, way to go!
Total: 48/50
Creativity: 20/20
(Trash Gathering's effect is really interesting, attaching multiple item cards with no added effects from the items themselves; the attack is also cool and I really like the synergy between both. Excellent!)
Wording: 13/15
(The attack should say "Item card discarded in this way" (see Genesect-EX FCO). Then I was gonna say that you forgot the "Once" in the Ability; but given you might actually attach during your whole turn, you found a loophole. But being like that, you'd definitely need some rewording so it'd say "this Pokémon can have up to 5 Items attached to it. At the end of your opponent's turn, if this Pokémon has any Item card attached, discard them." Not exact wording (I believe there's something I'm missing), but something along those lines; so the deduction is there, either way.)
Believability: 15/15
(Balance is actually really nice, the damage output is really balanced and there'll be a point where you simply don't have Items left; apart that you'd have to think between keeping those for the HP or to boost the attacks damage. Good!)
Wowsa, I dodn't expect this card to be this good! You did an amazing job, dos, way to go!
Total: 48/50
16. @Vracken
Vespiquen – Electric – HP90
Stage 1 – Evolves from Combee
Ability: Forage
When you would draw your first card on your turn, you may instead name a card type (Pokémon, Trainer or Energy). Reveal cards from the top of your deck until you reveal a card of the chosen type. Put it into your hand. Shuffle the other cards back into your deck.
[L] Timely Reinforcements
Search your deck for any number of either Combee or Vespiquen, reveal them and put them into your hand. Shuffle your deck afterward.
[L] [C] [C] Release the Swarm 10+
This attack does 40 more damage for each Pokémon put onto your Bench or evolved this turn.
Weakness: [F] (x2)
Resistance: [M] (-20)
Retreat: [C]
While foraging if a Vespiquen finds itself in danger, it will release a pheromone calling for its hive to protect it.
NO. 416 Beehive Pokémon HT: 3’11’’ WT: 84.9 lbs.
Stage 1 – Evolves from Combee
Ability: Forage
When you would draw your first card on your turn, you may instead name a card type (Pokémon, Trainer or Energy). Reveal cards from the top of your deck until you reveal a card of the chosen type. Put it into your hand. Shuffle the other cards back into your deck.
[L] Timely Reinforcements
Search your deck for any number of either Combee or Vespiquen, reveal them and put them into your hand. Shuffle your deck afterward.
[L] [C] [C] Release the Swarm 10+
This attack does 40 more damage for each Pokémon put onto your Bench or evolved this turn.
Weakness: [F] (x2)
Resistance: [M] (-20)
Retreat: [C]
While foraging if a Vespiquen finds itself in danger, it will release a pheromone calling for its hive to protect it.
NO. 416 Beehive Pokémon HT: 3’11’’ WT: 84.9 lbs.
RUN! AN ELECTRICAL QUEEN BEE!! WE'RE ALL GOING TO DIE...!!!
Creativity: 20/20
(I'm blown by this card, to be honest. Forage is an amazing effect; Reinforcements is rather cool; and Release the Swarm is really good as well, something not seen so far! Amazing!)
Wording: 15/15
(Nothing to see here...)
Believability: 5/15
(The Ability is balanced, if you ask me. Sure, you get to control your topdeck; but not entirely, since you'll still get what's closer to the top; and being a Stage 1 also bumps down it's usage. On the other hand, the first attack is alright. But one single card made this Vespiquen absolutely overpowered in Expanded so, that alongside FoGP, you can hit for, literally, INFINITE damage... Jumpluff DEX. Need I say more?)
To be honest, I was surprised this card was about to get a 50/50... until I remembered Jumpluff and it all pummeled down. xD I'd have a deeper look into the formats if I were you.
Total: 40/50
Creativity: 20/20
(I'm blown by this card, to be honest. Forage is an amazing effect; Reinforcements is rather cool; and Release the Swarm is really good as well, something not seen so far! Amazing!)
Wording: 15/15
(Nothing to see here...)
Believability: 5/15
(The Ability is balanced, if you ask me. Sure, you get to control your topdeck; but not entirely, since you'll still get what's closer to the top; and being a Stage 1 also bumps down it's usage. On the other hand, the first attack is alright. But one single card made this Vespiquen absolutely overpowered in Expanded so, that alongside FoGP, you can hit for, literally, INFINITE damage... Jumpluff DEX. Need I say more?)
To be honest, I was surprised this card was about to get a 50/50... until I remembered Jumpluff and it all pummeled down. xD I'd have a deeper look into the formats if I were you.
Total: 40/50
17. @Little Cherrim
Octillery - HP90 - [R]
[Ability] Pulpo Pikante
If this Pokémon is damaged by an attack containing the words “Bite", “Chomp”, or “Crunch”, the attacking Pokémon is now Burned.
[C] Octo-Out -10
Flip a coin. If heads, return this Pokémon and all cards attached to it into your hand.
[R][R] Searing Suctions - 30
The defending Pokémon can’t retreat during your opponent’s next turn. As long as this Octillery is your active Pokémon, this attack does 10 more damage. (before applying Weakness and Resistance).
Weakness: Water (x2)
Resistance: Grass (-20)
Retreat: [C]
[Ability] Pulpo Pikante
If this Pokémon is damaged by an attack containing the words “Bite", “Chomp”, or “Crunch”, the attacking Pokémon is now Burned.
[C] Octo-Out -10
Flip a coin. If heads, return this Pokémon and all cards attached to it into your hand.
[R][R] Searing Suctions - 30
The defending Pokémon can’t retreat during your opponent’s next turn. As long as this Octillery is your active Pokémon, this attack does 10 more damage. (before applying Weakness and Resistance).
Weakness: Water (x2)
Resistance: Grass (-20)
Retreat: [C]
If a fish evolving into an octopus wasn't weird enough, now we get it blazing red... oh, my...
Creativity: 18/20
(A really solid score. Pulpo Pikante might be one of the most original effect's I've seen in a while; and Searing Suctions is also really interesting. Octo Out is average at best, but the other ones compensate it. Nice!)
Wording: 11/15
("Defending" "Active" and "Attacking" should go Capitalized. Also, the attack should say "if this Pokémon" instead.)
Believability: 7/15
(Uhm, dude... Where's the Stage? xD You have a literally unplayable Pokémon that doesn't even evolve from anyone...? So, EVEN IF you could play thins, the card's balance is on point, the Ability can't be over used, the first attack doesn't have a direct benefit and the second one is actually not as strong. But apart from that, you missed the Dex Stats and Entry.)
Lesson we learned today? Make sure you can actually play your spicy octopus xD
Total: 36/50
Creativity: 18/20
(A really solid score. Pulpo Pikante might be one of the most original effect's I've seen in a while; and Searing Suctions is also really interesting. Octo Out is average at best, but the other ones compensate it. Nice!)
Wording: 11/15
("Defending" "Active" and "Attacking" should go Capitalized. Also, the attack should say "if this Pokémon" instead.)
Believability: 7/15
(Uhm, dude... Where's the Stage? xD You have a literally unplayable Pokémon that doesn't even evolve from anyone...? So, EVEN IF you could play thins, the card's balance is on point, the Ability can't be over used, the first attack doesn't have a direct benefit and the second one is actually not as strong. But apart from that, you missed the Dex Stats and Entry.)
Lesson we learned today? Make sure you can actually play your spicy octopus xD
Total: 36/50
18. @Celever
Mantine HP 130 Psychic
Basic Pokémon
[P] Kindhearted Gawk
Flip a coin. If heads, the opponent's Active Pokémon is now Confused. If tails, the opponent's Active Pokémon is now Asleep.
[P][C] Amnesiac Haze 10+
Remove all Special Conditions from your opponent's Active Pokémon. If you do, remove all Special Conditions from 1 of your Benched Pokémon. Does 30 more damage for each Special Condition removed.
[P][P][P][P] Hula I Ke Au Hou
Mantine is Knocked Out. Heal all damage and remove all Special Conditions from the next Pokémon you play from your bench.
Weakness: [D]x2
Resistance: [P]-20
Retreat: [C][C]
It swims elegantly, mindless of Remoraid hitching on to its broad fins. It has a docile nature.
NO. 226 Kite Pokémon HT: 6'11" WT: 485.0 lbs
Basic Pokémon
[P] Kindhearted Gawk
Flip a coin. If heads, the opponent's Active Pokémon is now Confused. If tails, the opponent's Active Pokémon is now Asleep.
[P][C] Amnesiac Haze 10+
Remove all Special Conditions from your opponent's Active Pokémon. If you do, remove all Special Conditions from 1 of your Benched Pokémon. Does 30 more damage for each Special Condition removed.
[P][P][P][P] Hula I Ke Au Hou
Mantine is Knocked Out. Heal all damage and remove all Special Conditions from the next Pokémon you play from your bench.
Weakness: [D]x2
Resistance: [P]-20
Retreat: [C][C]
It swims elegantly, mindless of Remoraid hitching on to its broad fins. It has a docile nature.
NO. 226 Kite Pokémon HT: 6'11" WT: 485.0 lbs
If only IRL rays were so chill as this one :v
Creativity: 12/20
(Kindhearted Gawk is alright, we've seen stuff like that before... and the other attacks are SOMEWHAT original, but there's one MAJOR issue I'll discuss in Believability.)
Wording: 11/15
(First, in the first attack, it should say "your opponent's" in both instances. Also, "this attack does 30 more..." in the second one. "This Pokémon" instead of "Mantine" in the other one. Lastly, the noun "Bench" goes capitalizeed.)
Believability: 3/15
(I'm not sure how familiar you are with the TCG, Cel, but... Special Conditions can only affect the Active Pokémon. Literally. No such thing exists that Poisons or Burns a Benched Pokémon. And as a rule, all effects INCLUDING Special Conditions are removed once te Pokémon leaves the Active spot in any way. So you made your last 2 attacks with, basically, no added effect or purpose whatsoever. Balancing can't even be judged properly since you're inventing mechanics that aren't even included in the card.)
Well, it seems that your little ignorance when it comes to game mechanics hit you hard. Maybe some more research would be really handy.
Total: 26/50
Creativity: 12/20
(Kindhearted Gawk is alright, we've seen stuff like that before... and the other attacks are SOMEWHAT original, but there's one MAJOR issue I'll discuss in Believability.)
Wording: 11/15
(First, in the first attack, it should say "your opponent's" in both instances. Also, "this attack does 30 more..." in the second one. "This Pokémon" instead of "Mantine" in the other one. Lastly, the noun "Bench" goes capitalizeed.)
Believability: 3/15
(I'm not sure how familiar you are with the TCG, Cel, but... Special Conditions can only affect the Active Pokémon. Literally. No such thing exists that Poisons or Burns a Benched Pokémon. And as a rule, all effects INCLUDING Special Conditions are removed once te Pokémon leaves the Active spot in any way. So you made your last 2 attacks with, basically, no added effect or purpose whatsoever. Balancing can't even be judged properly since you're inventing mechanics that aren't even included in the card.
)Well, it seems that your little ignorance when it comes to game mechanics hit you hard. Maybe some more research would be really handy.
Total: 26/50
19. @NinjaPenguin
Basic Rotom HP 70 Fire
NO. 479 Plasma Pokémon HT: 1'00" WT: 0.7 lbs.
Ability: Electronic Possession
Once during your turn (before your attack), you may switch a Pokémon Tool card attached to this Pokémon with a Pokémon Tool card attached to another of your Rotom.
[R][C][C] Short Circuit 30
Discard as many [R] Energy attached to this Pokémon as you like. Flip a coin for each [R] Energy you discarded in this way. If at least 1 is heads, the Defending Pokémon is now Burned. If at least 2 are heads, this attack does 30 more damage and the Defending Pokémon is now Paralyzed. If at least 3 are heads, both Active Pokémon are now Knocked Out.
Weakness: [W] x2 Resistance:
Retreat Cost: [C]
Rotom are built of plasma. They are used to power special motors.
NO. 479 Plasma Pokémon HT: 1'00" WT: 0.7 lbs.
Ability: Electronic Possession
Once during your turn (before your attack), you may switch a Pokémon Tool card attached to this Pokémon with a Pokémon Tool card attached to another of your Rotom.
[R][C][C] Short Circuit 30
Discard as many [R] Energy attached to this Pokémon as you like. Flip a coin for each [R] Energy you discarded in this way. If at least 1 is heads, the Defending Pokémon is now Burned. If at least 2 are heads, this attack does 30 more damage and the Defending Pokémon is now Paralyzed. If at least 3 are heads, both Active Pokémon are now Knocked Out.
Weakness: [W] x2 Resistance:
Retreat Cost: [C]
Rotom are built of plasma. They are used to power special motors.
Fitting, I'd say, given how plasma is actually really hot
Creativity: 19/20
(Oh, I love the YOLO in that attack! xD It's actually really really nice; and that Ability is good enough as well. Good job!)
Wording: 15/15
(Nothing to see here.)
Believability: 15/15
(The Ability can't be abused to a broken extent; and the attackis a high-cost, high-risk and moderate-high reward if you do your stuff properly and are lucky enough, but you can't really abuse the attack that much. Perfectly done!)
So it appears we saved the best for last... might as well cook dessert now, could ya?
Total: 49/50
Creativity: 19/20
(Oh, I love the YOLO in that attack! xD It's actually really really nice; and that Ability is good enough as well. Good job!)
Wording: 15/15
(Nothing to see here.)
Believability: 15/15
(The Ability can't be abused to a broken extent; and the attackis a high-cost, high-risk and moderate-high reward if you do your stuff properly and are lucky enough, but you can't really abuse the attack that much. Perfectly done!)
So it appears we saved the best for last... might as well cook dessert now, could ya?
Total: 49/50
3rd Place: Professor Palutena’s punching Lopunny, with 46/50 points.
2nd Place: double o squirtle’s burning Wormadam, with 48/50 points.
1st Place: NinjaPenguin’s Fiery Rotom, with 49/50 points.
So we come to a close! I was really surprised by the creativity from a lot of you this month. Hope to see this as a trend! So, without anything else to say, I'll see you guys in June!
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