Writing Just a little poem

[#1weavile]

Life, long and interminable,
Yet short and unnoticeable
Is it all an illusion, a dream,
Or is this just a radical scheme?
Unexamined, it is hopeless.
Over-examined, it is pointless.
Science or faith, does it matter,
Either way my spirit will shatter.
While searching for the real truth,
What I found was forsooth.
Reality is everything, yet nothing,
Real, yet unreal
For when it was uncovered
I had never recovered.

I was just a little depressed and wanted to share my feelings and ideas.

 

[Alvin and the Patrats]

Don't feel pressured to make poems with a rhyme scheme. I feel most of the best poetry is free verse, it allows one to freely express one's eloquence. But rhyme still has definite potential for a powerful on the reader.

For example, just two lines:
Sun sinks wearily beneath a moribund sky,
Night is come, clouds came to die.

That is what I consider a flowing rhyme. Your rhymes are a bit more unsuitable, as if only there in order to rhyme with the previous line. Free verse is neglected far too much by amateur poets. Use it and love it.

 

[Incinermyn]

Not bad (and interesting theme), but I have to agree with Alvin and the Minizumis on not using the whole rhyme scheme thing in poems. Personally I like doing a lot of short poems because they tend to give off the most dramatic effect due to the fact that they capture a momentary image. Alternatively I could suggest trying a style known as the sestina, in which you write six six-line stanzas and reuse the last words (or their homophones) in a shifting order and finish with a seventh three-line stanza in which you use them two per line any place you want (it's not a very fixed form, from what I recall, but does give an interesting stir to the otherwise worn out style of rhyming).

Still, good job. Hope to see more!