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Okay im trying this one last time. If you want your own character in this please fill out this form:

Name:
Starter pokemon:
What your character's personality is like:


Now this is about A boy named Dave who dreams of becoming A pokemon master one day. He has yet to get his starter pokemon but will get it soon.

Okay here is chapter 1!




Chapter 1 A new beginning and A new journey!

Dave had just headed of to Professor Birch's lab to get his starter pokemon. Just as he arived he heard A loud bang! Dave ran in the lab to see what had happened and saw smoke everywhere. Dave then shouted out "What just happened!?" Dave then heard A man shout back "Its okay just open the door and leave it open!" Dave did so and the smoke went away. Dave then saw that the man was Prof. Birch. Dave then asked "Professor Birch, what happened?" Birch replied "Oh it nothing. It was only just an experiment that had gone wrong and exploded Dave." Dave then said "Pthh, you call that nothing?" And then started to chuckle. Birch then gave Dave the evil eye and walked over to where Dave was standing. Professor Birch then said "So Dave, what are you here for?" Dave replied "Remember? Im here for my starter pokemon." Prof. Birch then said "Oh yes please follow me." Professor Birch lead Dave to A table with three pokemon on it. Treecko, Torchic, and Mudkip. Professor Birch said "You can pick anyone of these pokemon Dave." Dave then looked at the pokemon. Dave then picked up Torchic and said "Professor Birch, I want this one. Professor Brich then picked up A pokeball and put Torchic in it. He then handed Dave A pokedex and five pokeball's. Dave then thanked Professor Birch and walked outside the lab where his mother was waiting for him. Dave's mother said "So dave are you ready for your pokemon journey?" Dave replied "Yes, but I just wish dad was here to see me." Dave's mother then said "He wished he could, but he had to take care of some buisness." She then hugged Dave, and gave him some food for the road. As Dave walked off he waved goodbye to his mom. Dave then let his Torchic out of its pokeball and the two walked off.


Okay that was Chapter 1. Please tell me what you think of it and if you think it needs work please tell what you think I should work on.
 
Ok love it continue while i'm at it here is my character.

Name: Davis
Starter pokemon: (Wanted to start with Torchic but oh well) Treecko
What your character's personality: Davis is shy and donsen't like talking to kids that look crazy. He can gather up his courage if he needs to. His dream is to be a Pokemon Master and a Top Coordinator.
Final Team (If I can't use Sinnoh Pokemon):Sceptile,Rapidash,Beautifly,Crawdaunt,Dusclops, and Flygon
Final Team If I Can use Sinnoh Pokemon: Sceptile,Rapidash,Beautifly, Floazel,Duskinor, and Flygon
 
Name: Leo
Starter: Mudkip
Personality: Smart and to be the best cooridinator in the world.
Final Team: Swampert,Swellow,Plusle,Minun,Typhlosion,and Venasaur.
 
Okay I cant add your characters till chapter 4 since I have already written chapters 2 and 3. Here is chapter 2.


Chapter 2 Just in Taillow!


After Dave had let Torchic out of its pokeball, they started to walk off twords Petalburg City. Torchic started to look around, Dave then said "You hungry Torchic?" Dave then pulled out some food and put it in A small bowl for Torchic. Torchic looked at it and started to make some noise. He then bent down and started eating. Dave then saw A flock of Taillow flying over him. Excited and curious he started to follow them. But as soon as he got under the trees he couldnt see them. Dave then headed back to where Torchic was. He saw that Torchic was done eating and stuck the bowl back in his bag. Dave then picked up Torchic and walked off. He then saw more Taillow flying over him. This time he was able to follow them and found where they landed. It was an open field with several trees. But he started to look around and it seemed like they all dissapeared. Out of frustration he threw A rock at one of the trees. All od A sudden A bunch of Taillow flew out of the tree and started to go after Dave. Dave then dropped Torchic and shouted out "RUN!!!" The two started to run but they were no match for the Taillow. As the Taillow were catching up to Dave, Dave had come to A river. He then shouted out "Torchic use ember on the that tree!" Torchic did so but unlike Dave thought, the tree didnt fall down as Torchic's ember wasnt powerful enough. The Taillow then caught up to Dave and Torchic. Dave then covered his head as he was about to be attacked by the flock of Taillow, Torchic had used Ember on all of the Taillow. But this time, it was much more pwerful which made the Taillow fly off. Except for one. It was the only Taillow that hadnt been hit by the Ember. It then swooped down and hit Torchic with Wing Attack. Torchic went then went flying across the river. Dave then yelled out "Torchic! Are you okay?!" Torchic then replied with A "Tor, Torchic!" Dave then said "Okay good! Now Torchic use Ember!" Torchic then fired out Ember from its beak which hit the Taillow. The Taillow then countered with Quick Attack, which sent Torchic into the river. Dave then jumped into the river after Torchic. He managed to grab Torchic and pull the both of them onto A rock sticking out of the water. Dave then took of his shirt and started to dry Torchic with it. Torchic started to look up at Dave but then quickly got up. Dave then said "Are you okay buddy?" Torchic nodded his head yes and then jumped from rock to rock until he got back to the land. Dave then shouted out "Now Torchic use Fire Spin on Taillow!!" A firey balst then shot out from Torchic's beak and hit Taillow. The Taillow then fell from the sky and crashed into the ground. But Taillow had gotten back up. Dave then said "This Taillow is tough, but not tough enough! Torchic, now use Qucik Attack while Taillow is still on the ground!" Torchic had then ran into Taillow sending it back into A tree. Dave then through A pokeball at Taillow. The pokeball then started to move around but then stopped. Dave then picked up the pokeball and said "Yes! I caught A Taillow!" He then put the pokeball in his pocket and walked off. But as he did A mysterious character watched from afar.


Okay that's chapter 2. CHapter 3 will be up later. Oh and KeybladePokemon, you can have Sinnoh pokemon if you want. And I dont care if you want Torchic as your starter. Even though its my characters starter to me it really doesnt matter.
 
WoW! That is really good! Here is my character.

Name: Max

Starter pokemon: Was given a Growithe from his family to start his journey.

Personality: He is very giddy and so fun, at least to himself. People think he is very annoying but he never stops trying to be. ( INSIGHT ON CHILDHOOD: That's why his parents sent him away on his journey.....to get him out of the house.)

Final team: UNKNOWN AT THIS POINT

Hope this is a good character!
 
bubba235 said:
WoW! That is really good! Here is my character.

Name: Max

Starter pokemon: Was given a Growithe from his family to start his journey.

Personality: He is very giddy and so fun, at least to himself. People think he is very annoying but he never stops trying to be. ( INSIGHT ON CHILDHOOD: That's why his parents sent him away on his journey.....to get him out of the house.)

Final team: UNKNOWN AT THIS POINT

Hope this is a good character!
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Thanks dude. Anyways here is chapter 3:


Chapter 3 Petalburg City! Dave's first battle!


Dave and Torchic had been walking for awhile but finally reached Petalburg city. Dave then ran down to the gym and ran in. He then ran up to the gym leader, Norman, and said "I challenge you to A gym battle!" Norman then turned around and said "Young boy let me see your badge case." Dave then handed Norman his badge case. Norman opened it and said "Sorry you cant battle me until you have four more badges." Dave then sadly walked out of the gym and into the pokemon centre. He then sat down with Torchic on A small bench. Nurse Joy then said to Dave "Why such A long face?" Dave replied "Well, its Norman the gym leader. I cant battle him until I have four badges." Nurse Joy replied "Well if your looking for A battle im sure there's A trainer around here somewhere." Dave looked up and said "Well Torchic, do you want to battle?" Torchic just replied with A "Torchic, Tor, Torchic!" Dave and Torchic then walked out of the pokemon center and started to look around for someone to battle. All of A sudden A mysterious stranger jumped down from A tree in front of Dave. He then said "You have something I want. Give it to me. Dave then replied "Trust me I dont have anything you want. And even if I did im not going to give it to A freak like you. The boy then said "You just made A big mistake." He then sent out his Nuzleaf. Dave then said "Taillow I choose you! Come on out!" Dave started the battle of by telling Taillow to use Wing Attack. The mysterious boy shouted out to his Nuzleaf "Dodge it and use Bullet Seed!" Nuzleaf then dodged the attack and hit Taillow with Bullet Seed causing Taillow to fly back into A tree. Dave then shouted out to Taillow "Now Taillow use Quick Attack!" Taillow quickly flew twords Nuzleaf and hit him. Dave then said "Taillow finish him off with Wing Attack!" But as Taillow got closer and closer to Taillow the other boyy said "Nuzleaf move to your right and use Pound!" Nuzleaf then moved over to the side and as Taillow came swooping down, Nuzleaf kicked Taillow causing it to fly in the ground. Taillow then tried to get back up but couldnt. Dave then returned Taillow and looked back but the mysterious boy was gone. Dave then headed back to the pokemon center to get some rest.




Sorry for the wait guys but thats chapter 3. CHapter 4 will be up in A second.
 
That is really good. Is this mysterious guy going to be like Ash's Team Rocket? I am itching to hear more.
 
Okay I knokw everyone has been waiting awhile but here is chapter 4!


Chapter 4 New firends, new battles, new fun.


After heading back to the pokemon centre Dave, Torchic, and Taillow had decided to stay the night there. After getting setled in his room Dave headed to the diner to get something to eat. Once he sat down he overheard A few boys his age talking. One of them said "Where's my food?! Im so hungry!" The boy then grabbed A fork A knife and started to bang them on the table saying "I want food! I want food!" One of the other boys then said "Max, sit down! Your embaressing yourself and the rest of us." The boy named Max then said "Im sorry. But ever since that jerk beat me I have been mad all day." The Chef then went to the table with the boys on it and gave them their food. But right as the boy named Max was about to start eating, Dave's Torchic jumped up on the table and started eating his food. Dave saw this and ran over to grab Torchic. Max then looked at Dave and said "Is this your Torchic?" Dave replied "Yes it is." Max then looked up at Dave and said "Well then keep it in its pokeball!" Dave then returned Torchic to its pokeball. The boy Max then sat back down, took one of his friend's food and started to eat it. The boy then said "Hey Max thats my food! We are hungry aswell you know." Max then said "Shut-up Davis! Suck it up." Davis then started to grab the last boy's food but the boy hit Davis over the head with his hand. Davis then said "Oww! What was that for Leo?" Leo replied you very well know what it was for!" Davis then grabbed some of his food back from Max which caused Max to grab Leo's food which caused Leo to hit both Max and Davis over the head. They both then looked at Leo and everyone started to hit eachother. By this time Dave's Torchic had busted out of his pokeball and saw the fight. It then used Ember on all three of the boys. All three of the boys then looked at Torchic and said at the same time "GET HIM!!!" The boys then grabbed food from the table and started to through it at Torchic. Dave saw this and said "Hey pick on someone your own size!" He then grabbed some food and started to throw it. But the Chef had just walked in and saw what had happen he then shouted at all of them "Get out out! GET OUT! GET OUT!!!" All of the boys the ran out of the diner and outside. Dave then said "Im sorry for what my Torchic did." Max then looked at him and said "No its okay. We should be the ones apologizing. Hey I know, tomorow go to that park over there and we will make it up to you." Max then pointed over to A park across the street. Dave agreed to be there at exactly 5:00 AM to avoid the croud. He then headed off to his room to get some sleep. The next morning Dave was awaken by A load alarm clock. He then shut it off and headed to the park Max showed him. Once he got there he saw Max, Davis, and Leo standing on A hill. He ran up to where hey were standing and saw what they were looking at. In excitement Dave said "Wow what is this?!" Leo replied "Its an obsticle course for pokemon. We built it ourselves." Davis then said "Yeah its for your, uh Torchic. We noticed that his ember wasnt the strongest so this will help him out. And at the end Max will be waiting for you to battle. Are you ready to start?" Dave then shook his head yes. But he then said "Can I use two pokemon?" Max replied "Go right ahead." Dave then sent out both Torchic and Taillow. He then told them what it was and they started to run to it. As they got to the first obsticle it was A sandbag hanging from A tree branch. Dave started off by saying "Torchic use Ember on the branch and Taillow use Peck on the rope!" Both pokemon did as told and the sandbag fell with ease. They then came up to 3 branch'es that were hanging down and swinging back and forth. Taillow flew through easily but Torchic was still standing there. Dave then said "Torchic now run!" Torchic started to run but stopped in the middle. The branches then swang by again and Torchic ran through the rest of it. They then came up to A small pond. The again Taillow flew across it but for Torchic it would be harder. Torchic hopped on A wooden seat attached to A rope but the only way to make the seat go across the pond was to burn down the knot in the rope that was about half way across the pond. Dave said to Torchic "Torchic focus on the knot and when your ready use Ember on it and give it all you've got. Torchic then started to stare at the knot and shouted out "Torchic Tor, Torchic"! And fired ember at the knot. The ember had burned through and Torchic went across the pond. Dave ran with him and found Max at the end. Max then said "So are you ready for your battle, uh?" Dave then said "My name is Dave." Max then finished his sentence by saying "So are you ready then Dave?" Dave then said "You know I am."



Okay thats chapter 4. Like I said sorry for the long wait.
 
WoW! That was really good! I could just see the fight in my mind. And that is a good way to introduce the characters. I really liked it. Keep up the good work.
 
Thanks guys. Anyways here is chapter 5:


Chapter 5 Max vs Dave! Pokemon Battle!



"Okay" said Max. "This will be A 2vs2 double battle." Dave then said "Okay, Taillow Torchic I choose you!" Max replied "Your going down! Growlithe, Ninjask come on out!" Dave started off by saying "Torchic use Ember on Ninjask and Taillow use Quick Attack on Growlithe!" Max then said "Ninjask use Double Team! Growlithe dodge Taillow's attack!" Before Torchic could use Ember Ninjask had used Ember. But as Growlither tried to dodge Taillow, it was already to late and Growlithe was knocked to the ground. Dave then said "Now Taillow use Wing Attack on Growlithe! And Torchic use Ember on all of the Ninjask until you find the right one!" As Taillow swooped down to hit Growlithe Max yelled out "Growlithe now use Bite!" The Growlithe then grabbed ahold of Taillow's wing and through him against A tree.But as Taillow tried to shake Growlithe off, Growlithe wouldnt let go. Torchic on the otherhand had been shooting out Ember hitting all of the Ninjask until he hit the real one. The Ninjask had been burned. Dave then shouted out to Torchic and Taillow "Taillow use Wing Attack and smack Growlithe into the tree and Torchic use Ember on Ninjask again!" But just as Dave said that Torchic had used A different attack. It was Fire Spin. It hit Ninjask and Ninjask was then trapped in A ring of fire. Taillow on the otherhand tried to use wing attack but Growlithe was just too heavy. Max then said "Growlithe finish of Taillow with Ember and Ninjask try and fly out of the fire!" Growlithe then let go of Taillows wing and had used Ember just like it was told to. Taillow then fell to the ground. It tried to get back up but just couldnt. Dave then returned Taillow and said "Now Torchic use peck on Ninjask!" Torchic then hit Ninjask with Peck and Ninjask fainted. Max then returned his Ninjask. Dave then shouted out "Torchic use Scratch on Growlithe!" Max then told his Growlithe "Growlithe dodge it now and then use Take Down!" Growlithe then jumped to his left where the tree was and bounced off the tree with his hind legs and tackled Torchic. Dave then said "Torchic are you okay?" Torchic shook his head yes and started to run twords Growlithe. Dave then said "Now Torchic use Peck!" Torchic ran to Growlithe and pecked him with its beak. "Now Torchic finish him off with Quick Attack!" Shouted out Dave. Torchic then ran into Growlithe knocking him back. Growlithe then fell down to the ground. Max then said "Growlith, give it all you've got! Use Flamethrower!" Growlithe then puched himself back up and shot out A firey blast at Trochic! Torchic turned around and tried to outrun it but he just couldnt. He was then caught in the middle of it. Torchic then fell to the ground. Torchic had been injured badly but still tried to get up. "Torchic, lets show this guy what your made of, use ROCK SLIDE!" Torchic then stood up and smashed his feet on the ground. All of A sudden several rocks started to roll down from A nearby hill. All of the rocks smashed into the Growlithe. Growlithe then fell back on the ground. He tried to get back up but he just couldnt. Max then returned his Growlithe and said "That was A good battle Dave. I didnt realize your Torchic was that strong. The two then walked back up the hill where Leo and Davis were waiting for them. Davis then congratulated Dave on his victory. As Dave was about to walk off Leo stopped him and said "Hey, we are headed to Rusboro City. You wanna come with us?" Dave replied "Sure why not?" All four boys then headed off for Rustboro city.



Okay thats chapter 5. Chapter 6 will be up in A little bit.
 
bubba235 said:
You just keep on coming up with good ideas don't you? Great Job!
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Thanks. Anyways Chapter 6 wont be up until tomorow.

Chapter 6 will be up in A sec.
 
So are we not doing this Fan Fic anymore or what? I really liked it, but if you think it isn't going anywhere then jsut do whatever you've got to do.
 
Sorry for not posting anything lately guys. I just havent been feeling good. But anyways here is chapter 6:



Chapter 6 My oh my its raining Bagon!

As, Dave, Davis, Max, and Leo headed off to Rustboro City, they saw A trainer running down the path they were on with his Mudkip in has arms. Dave then asked him "What happened to your Mudkip?" The man replied "I heard there was A Bagon nearby that was real strong so I challenged it to A battle. But he fainted my Mudkip in one hit!" THe man then ran off. Leo then said "A Bagon, thats funny there usually nowhere near these parts." Max replied "Who cares its strong! I am going to try and capture it!" The gang then ran off to where they heard the Bagon was. Dave then said "Torchic come on out!" Torchic then came out of his pokeball to help look for the bagon. Davis then shouted out "I dont think the Bagon is here guys!" All of A sudden A Bagon jumped down from A nearby cliff. Dave saw it and shouted out to everyone "Look out!" Leo then moved A little to his left and the Bagon hit A rock which caused it to crumble into several little pieces. Leo then said "Plusle, come on out and help me get this Bagon!" He then sent out Plusle. He started off by saying "Plusle use THUNDER!" Plusle then jumped up in the air and A huge beam of lightning came down from the sky. But Bagon dodged it and hit Plusle with Headbutt. THe Plusle then fell over fainted. Leo ran over and returned his Plusle. Max then stepped up and said "Its my turn now! Growlithe I chose you!" The Bagon then ran up to Growlithe trying to use Headbutt, but Max shouted out "Growlithe dodge Bagon and use Take Down!" Growlithe dodged Bagon and hit it with Take Down. But then the Bagon ran back up to the cliff and jumped off again. But this time it wasnt using Headbutt, it was using Skull Bash! Max then shouted out "No fair Bagon arent supposed to know that!" The Bagon then hit and Growlithe fainted. As Max returned his Growlithe some people were watching from afar. It was Jessie, James, and Meowth. Meowth then says "Wow look at that Bagon! Its strong and im sure the boss would give us A promotion if we get it for him!" Jessie then replies "Thats A good idea Meowth. Come one lets go!" The three then hopped into their ballon and James grabbed A bazooka. He then fired it and A net captured the Bagon. A hand then reached down and grabbed the net. Dave then shouted out "Who are you people!" Jessie then replied "We are Team Rocket! We steal pokemon for A living!" Dave then said " Taillow come on out!" As Taillow came out of his pokeball Dave said "Taillow use Wing Attack! Taillow then popped Team Rockets balloon and the Bagon fell as they blasted off. Dave then said, Torchic are you ready to battle Bagon?!" Torchic then hopped infront of Dave but the Bagon walked up to Dave and shook his head no. He then hopped into one of Dave's empty pokeballs. Dave then said "What did he do that for?" Davis then replied "I guess since you saved him he decided to go along with you." Dave, Leo, Davis, and Max then walked off.



Okay that was chapter 6! Chapter 7 will be up in A second.
 
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