Writing Cold Heart | Warm Wind - Teal's Haiku Collection Tells...

[Teal]

Kairos
Wind's silent fanfare
giving shape to flowing time
a windless second.

Humidity
Shiny morning dew,
slightly above the ground: mist.
Tropical concert.

Kingdom
My fields are fertile
with most beautiful women
I see with closed eyes.

Theft
From my neighbour's tree
I snagged an apple, two, three,
they were wholly sour.

Unanswered
All over the world
every year leaves speculate
do they miss a part?

Sugarcoat
To conquer the world
it tried again and yet failed
the snowman melting.

Virtuoso
Night's virtuoso
incurable criminal
got my heart fairplay.

Fool
Flip-flop more, flip-flop.
Know when it's time to grow up,
juvenile adult.

Spectrum
No sight of winter
summer slowly fades away.
A mess inbetween.

Delirium
You said sanity
wading in a sea of blood
recalling that word.

Empty
A freezing wind squeals.
Winter, my cold fireside.
No warmth from others.

Wake
Wake with the nature.
Give everything a new life:
my heart thawing out.

Wait
Balmy thunderstorm.
Bus station, exchanged glimpses,
nods: we run instead.

Whole
A smile when you eat,
birds whisper about our love.
Ants are our small guests.

Halfway
The sky shines cold light.
Covered by countless brown leaves:
the lush green meadow.

Incredulous
A life of roses,
everything clicks together.
Too good to be true?

Fear
Shiver of the thought
that tonight my worst nightmare
waits at my front door.

Fruit
Look back at what once
was a seemingly doomed seed
flourishing, expand.

Cocoon
Hand in hand slowly
the wind blows very strongly
cover us in yard.

Acceptance
With you at my side
my last heartbeat fades away.
A smile on my face.

 

[Turtwig]

These poems are really nice in their aspect of tone. Even though you're limited on syllables, you can still make the reader feel your emotions in your poetry. Keep it up, I really like these!

My favorite is probably...

Fruit
Look back at what once
was a seemingly doomed seed
flourishing, expand.

I really liked how you turned an assumption over and showed how it isn't always correct, and that things turn out unexpected. I never really thought about it, but seeds are most of the time going to either die or be carried away, so there is actually a literal side along with what I believe to be an extended metaphor. For example, looking back at horrific events, such as almost losing a child during childbirth, and reflecting now about how much the child has grown. Or another example may be with America itself, failing with the Articles of Confederation back in its beginning, but now flourishes and has definitely expanded. .

Sorry if I'm getting carried away, but the point is that this collection, in my opinion, is written clearly and concisely--but each poem has that distinct tone that any audience can connect to.

Good luck and I hope to read more from you in the future!

 

[Teal]

Thank you. It is one of my favourites.

 

[le Roi-Soleil]

Teal, these are great! I truly look forward to seeing more from you!