Writing Blood, Sweat, and Pokemon: The story of when pokemon came into our world.

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Warning! The following story is PG-13 for language and violence!

Prolouge
For years people have wondered if there are other deminsions. Other realms filled with strange creatures and new people. One day a portal between two deminsions was opened. All over the world reports of portals opening were flying around. And out of those portals strange creature were comming. Red dragons with fire on their tails, big yellow mice with tails shaped like bolts of lightning and even green dinosaurs with flowers on their backs. But almost as soon as the portals opened the governments of the contries they were in were either capturing them or killing them. However the biggest of all the portals opened in Washington D.C in the United States. Hundreds of these creatures came out of it. The Police surronded the "wormhole" as it was now called and the battle began.

Chapter One
Two S.W.A.T vans pulled in front of the "wormhole". Police cars, helicopters and soldiers surrounded it and pointed their guns right at it. Then two yellow mice ran out of the "wormhole". The Police ran up to them and fired tazers. "Pika!" they screeched and the fell to the ground unconcious. But before they were done loading the mice into police vans a giant blue turtle with cannons pointing out of its shell followed by two little red chickens. The turtle pointed it's cannons at one of the S.W.A.T vans and fired them. Two massive jets of water smashed into the van and it turned over onto it's side. The two little chickens opened their mouths and screamed "Tooorrrrchhhiiic!" as the fired bursts of fire up at the helicopter above them. One of the chickens was tazed and loaded into a Police car just as five giant birds flew out of the "wormhole" and yelled "Fearow!!". They were two big to taze so three of the soldiers pointed M-16's up at them and fired. Two of the birds hit the ground with a thud and the others streaked down at the ground and began pecking and clawing at the soldiers. Just as the soldiers were about to fire their weapons a large red dragon with flames on it's tail flew out of the "wormhole" and landed in the center of all the fighting. A man jumped of the dragon's back, looked around at the carnage and yelled "Oh my god! What the h@#* did you do to these pokemon?!".

Well what do you think so far? Please comment!
 
WOW ROCKET!! THIS STORY IS AMAZING! I can tell already that it's going to be a great fan-fic. Keep up the good work!
 
Crazy story. It has good potential, but chapters are way, way, WAY too short.
 
Agreed. It has potential but if you don't have to scroll down to read the whole chapter, it's too short. Also, type it in MS Word or something else that has spell check. This allows for better spelling, which everyone loves ;)
 
No detail, and barely any length to it. Great story line, legthen your chapters much much much much more, and write with descent detail. Good plot.
 
Sorry about the short chapter. I was tired when I wrote so I wasn't able to make it that long. However I'll ty to make the rest of them longer. Here's Chapter Two.

Chapter Two

“Hold your fire!” a man in a military uniform said. “I’m in charge here!” he yelled at the man as all the soldiers and police lowered their weapons. “Who are you?!” the soldier yelled at the man. “I’m Ash Ketchum! A pokemon trainer!” Ash yelled to the soldier. The soldier walked forward and stood in front of Ash. “I’m Lt. Colonel Sam Davis! I’m with the United States Special Operations. And what in the wide world are pokemon?” Said Davis. “Well you see those?” Ash said pointing up at the Fearow. “Those are pokemon and where I come from there are over two hundred different kinds.” “Well why are they coming here?!” Davis said angrily. “Because.” Ash said calmly “In between our dimensions something is occurring. We have no idea what it is but something is making these portals open and the pokemon are terrified. They’re fleeing into your dimension to escape whatever is happening.”. The colonel just stood there looking confused. Ash sighed and ran his fingers through his hair. “These are living, intelligent creatures and you are killing them!” Ash yelled pointing at the two dead Fearow on the ground. “Come back to our base and we’ll talk about this!”. Ash sighed but agreed to go with Davis. The helicopter landed and Ash and Davis climbed inside. The helicopter took off and flew twenty miles away to a military base. It landed and Ash and Davis climbed out and walked inside it. “Welcome to the Glenn Military Base.” Davis said as they walked down a long hallway. Davis opened a door that led into a stairway. They walked down it and then Davis placed his hand on a palm scanner. It beeped and then the door next to it opened.
The two of them walked inside and Ash saw a large conference room with three people sitting at a long table inside. “Please sit down.” The man at the end of the table said. Ash frowned but sat down anyway. “I am the president of the United States of America.”. “Okay.” Ash said. “And the United States of America is what?”. “Oh my god.” The President said sighing. “We have A LOT to work on.”. Three hours later Ash understood where he was and what this world was like. However the President still didn’t understand pokemon very much. “So they’re kinda like animals?” he said hesitantly. “Yes! Exactly!” Ash said sounding relieved that the President was finally starting to understand. “And they have all kinds of powers? Like this move ‘Flamethrower’ where a Fire pokemon can breath fire?” the President said. “Yes! Yes!” Ash said smiling. “So if they’re like animals except with powers why can’t we just capture them and put them in cages to contain them?” the President asked. “Because they’re more than just common animals.” Ash said. “They’re very intelligent. They have the ability to figure out difficult problems and do everything for themselves. Some can even communicate with humans the same as you and I are right now. Don’t you see? They’re more human than normal animals. You can’t just capture them in cages they’re to powerful for that. However in my world we have devices called Pokeballs that can be used to capture pokemon.” “Why didn’t you bring some with you?!” one of the men next to the President asked sounding angry. “I did.” Ash answered calmly. He pulled out a Pokeball from his pocket and put in on the table.
“How can that little ball hold a dragon the size of the one you rode in on?!” the man asked. “Like this.” Ash said pulling out another Pokeball. It opened and Charizard flew out of it. It hit it’s head on the roof of the room and it yelled “Char!”. “Put it away! Put it away!” the man yelled throwing his arms over his head. Ash told Charizard to return and it flew back into the Pokeball which Ash then put back in his pocket. “So.” The President said trying to smooth over the tense moment. “The plan is that your government is going to bring in more of these Pokeballs so we can contain the pokemon and send them back to your world?” “Exactly.” Ash said. “But how can you arrange this?” Davis asked speaking for the first time in hours. “Oh? Did I not tell you that? Four months ago I became President of the Union of Regions. It’s kind of like your world’s United Nations.” “Alright so let’s go.” Davis said standing up. But just as he did another soldier burst into the room. “Mr. President!” he said gasping for breath. “The terrorists have landed on our coasts! They’re using some of the creatures that came through the wormholes to attack with!”. “D*@# them!” the President said. And then he ran out of the room.
 
Awesome.Can't wait for the next chapter.
 
Rocket member 777 said:
Sorry about the short chapter. I was tired when I wrote so I wasn't able to make it that long. However I'll ty to make the rest of them longer. Here's Chapter Two.

Chapter Two
“Hold your fire!” a man in a military uniform said. “I’m in charge here!” he yelled at the man as all the soldiers and police lowered their weapons. “Who are you?!” the soldier yelled at the man. “I’m Ash Ketchum! A pokemon trainer!” Ash yelled to the soldier. The soldier walked forward and stood in front of Ash. “I’m Lt. Colonel Sam Davis! I’m with the United States Special Operations. And what in the wide world are pokemon?” Said Davis. “Well you see those?” Ash said pointing up at the Fearow. “Those are pokemon and where I come from there are over two hundred different kinds.” “Well why are they coming here?!” Davis said angrily. “Because.” Ash said calmly “In between our dimensions something is occurring. We have no idea what it is but something is making these portals open and the pokemon are terrified. They’re fleeing into your dimension to escape whatever is happening.”. The colonel just stood there looking confused. Ash sighed and ran his fingers through his hair. “These are living, intelligent creatures and you are killing them!” Ash yelled pointing at the two dead Fearow on the ground. “Come back to our base and we’ll talk about this!”. Ash sighed but agreed to go with Davis. The helicopter landed and Ash and Davis climbed inside. The helicopter took off and flew twenty miles away to a military base. It landed and Ash and Davis climbed out and walked inside it. “Welcome to the Glenn Military Base.” Davis said as they walked down a long hallway. Davis opened a door that led into a stairway. They walked down it and then Davis placed his hand on a palm scanner. It beeped and then the door next to it opened. The two of them walked inside and Ash saw a large conference room with three people sitting at a long table inside. “Please sit down.” The man at the end of the table said. Ash frowned but sat down anyway. “I am the president of the United States of America.”. “Okay.” Ash said. “And the United States of America is what?”. “Oh my god.” The President said sighing. “We have A LOT to work on.”. Three hours later Ash understood where he was and what this world was like. However the President still didn’t understand pokemon very much. “So they’re kinda like animals?” he said hesitantly. “Yes! Exactly!” Ash said sounding relieved that the President was finally starting to understand. “And they have all kinds of powers? Like this move ‘Flamethrower’ where a Fire pokemon can breath fire?” the President said. “Yes! Yes!” Ash said smiling. “So if they’re like animals except with powers why can’t we just capture them and put them in cages to contain them?” the President asked. “Because they’re more than just common animals.” Ash said. “They’re very intelligent. They have the ability to figure out difficult problems and do everything for themselves. Some can even communicate with humans the same as you and I are right now. Don’t you see? They’re more human than normal animals. You can’t just capture them in cages they’re to powerful for that. However in my world we have devices called Pokeballs that can be used to capture pokemon.” “Why didn’t you bring some with you?!” one of the men next to the President asked sounding angry. “I did.” Ash answered calmly. He pulled out a Pokeball from his pocket and put in on the table. “How can that little ball hold a dragon the size of the one you rode in on?!” the man asked. “Like this.” Ash said pulling out another Pokeball. It opened and Charizard flew out of it. It hit it’s head on the roof of the room and it yelled “Char!”. “Put it away! Put it away!” the man yelled throwing his arms over his head. Ash told Charizard to return and it flew back into the Pokeball which Ash then put back in his pocket. “So.” The President said trying to smooth over the tense moment. “The plan is that your government is going to bring in more of these Pokeballs so we can contain the pokemon and send them back to your world?” “Exactly.” Ash said. “But how can you arrange this?” Davis asked speaking for the first time in hours. “Oh? Did I not tell you that? Four months ago I became President of the Union of Regions. It’s kind of like your world’s United Nations.” “Alright so let’s go.” Davis said standing up. But just as he did another soldier burst into the room. “Mr. President!” he said gasping for breath. “The terrorists have landed on our coasts! They’re using some of the creatures that came through the wormholes to attack with!”. “D*@# them!” the President said. And then he ran out of the room.

Now that was good. I really liked this chapter. I cant wait for the next one.
 
I'm actually working on a book. This is just pracitce for me to see how people like my writings. If I wrote a book would you guys buy it?
 
I didn't read it. Why? Cause it's a GIANT PARAGRAPH

Giant paragraphs are bad because not only does it look like one heaping mess of blah, it's easy for the reader to get lost.

Each person speaking should have their own line. Separate ideas into paragraphs. Fix it up and I'd be glad to give it a read.
 
I'm really sorry guys! I'm writing this in MS Word and when I try to paste it here it won't devide the paragraphs. I'm really sorry =(

Chapter Three

“Come on!” yelled Davis jumping up so fast he knocked his chair over. The two men who had been beside of the President ran after yelling “Mr. President wait!”. “Who are those guys anyway?” Ash asked Davis. “They’re the heads of the President’s Secret Service.” Davis said “Come on let’s go!”. The two of them ran out of the room after the President and Secret Service. “So who are these terrorists?” Ash said running down the hall next to Davis. “They’re a group of people who are at war with us. They’re radicals from the Muslim religion. Come on get in the chopper!” Davis yelled as they ran out of a door and towards the helicopter pad. The President, Davis, Ash and the two Secret Service men loaded into the helicopter and the President yelled at the pilot to head to the coast. “This is the first time they’ve launched an all out attack on the United States!” Davis yelled over the whir of the chopped blades as they took off. Ash looked over at the Secret Service guys and saw that they were each loading a clip into the pistols. “What are you doing?!” Ash said stunned “Didn’t I just tell you not to shoot the pokemon?!”.
“Oh don’t worry.” The men said. “These bullets aren’t for the pokemon.”. Just then a burst of fire shot up past their helicopter. They must be getting close to the action. “Mr. President! Catch!” Davis said throwing him a pistol. The President caught it and cocked it. “Got another one of those?” Ash asked. “No but I got this.” Davis said throwing him an Uzi and a clip. Ash loaded the clip into the gun. So at least now they were all armed. “We’re here!” the pilot called to them. The chopper landed and the five of them jumped out onto the ground. They appeared to be a couple miles back from the front lines. Just as Ash was wondering how they were going to get up to the beaches a Humvee pulled up and a soldier told them to get in. The all piled into it and rode up to the beaches. As soon as they got Ash knew why they were called terrorists. They were storming up the beach guns blazing. The two Secret Service ran in front of the President, held up their guns and started firing back. All around them U.S Soldier were running towards the terrorists shooting and yelling. Terrorist were running back at them firing back and screaming in a language Ash couldn’t understand. “Ash!” Davis yelled at him. “Why are you just standing there?! Fight back! Drive these invaders back!”.
Suddenly Ash remembered that he had a gun in his had so he lifted it up and pulled the trigger. Several shots flew out of the barrel of the gun and smashed into a terrorist who had been running up the beach. But as he looked around to find a new target he saw a Dragonite fly over their heads and fire a Hyper Beam into the U.S soldiers. As the Hyper Beam struck the ground Ash decided it was time to fight fire with fire. “Go Charizard!” he yelled and Charizard flew out of it’s Pokeball. “Get that Dragonite!” he yelled to it over the roar of the chaos around them. It flew up and collided with the terrorist’s Dragonite. The two of them started fighting viciously. Ash turned his attention back to the ground battle and saw a soldier fall into the sand as a terrorist shot him. Ash raised his Uzi and fired. The man fell to the ground with a scream of pain and surprise. Ash then looked around to see where the President had gone and saw him running forward to help a fallen soldier. But as he started dragging the man back up the beach a terrorist with an machine gun ran forward and sprayed the beach with fire. One of the shots flew at the President. Everything seemed to go in slow motion as the bullet collided with the President.
 
All right, looks great, I read through your second chapter to understand this one. Looks like this story's coming along nicely. :D
 
Wow that was pretty good. Like PMJ said it looks like your story's coming along nicely. Keep up the good work.
 
Here's the next chapter guys!

Chapter Four

The President fell into sand. He was bleeding from a wound in his chest and he was gasping for breath. “No!” Ash yelled running towards the President. “Medic! We need a medic! Now!” Ash yelled getting on his knees next to the President. He placed his hands over the bloody wound to try and stop the bleeding. He looked around and saw two medics heading towards him. One of them ripped of their helmet and long blonde hair fell down onto her back. “I need bandages and an IV NOW!!” she bellowed to the other medic. ‘Ugh!” she grunted pushing Ash’s hands away from the wound. “Where are those bandages!” she yelled. “Here they are!” the other medic ran back to them and pulled out some bandages and an IV bag from a white box with a red cross on it. The nurse rolled up the President’s left sleeve and stuck the IV in it. The she put some clear medicine into the bag and gave it to the other medic to hold. The she tore open the President’s shirt to give herself better access to the wound. She bandaged in and said “I can’t do a lot for him here. Freddy!” she yelled to the other medic. “Yes Major!” he said. “Radio for a chopper! We need to get him to a hospital right now!”
Freddy pulled out a radio and started talking to somebody. “Why are you just standing around?!” the female medic yelled at Ash. He jumped slightly. “Name and rank soldier!” “Ash Ketchum!” he responded. “Chief Officer and President of the U.R!” “U.R?” she said “I’ve never heard of them before. Are they,” but she was cut off as a grenade went off a couple of yards away from them. “Can you give us some cover fire?!” She said throwing her hands over her head. Ash held up his Uzi and started firing into the mob of terrorists that was now making it’s way up the beach. Just as he started shooting though Freddy ran back over and said “Major! The chopper has just landed! Let’s go!”. “Alright! She said. She grabbed the President’s legs and Freddy grabbed his arms. Then they started running up the beach weaving between U.S soldiers that were running the opposite direction. Ash followed them occasionally sending a few shots over his shoulder to take care of anyone who might be chasing them.
They climbed up a sand dune and then down the other side. Waiting there was a military helicopter. They loaded the President onto a stretcher in the chopper and two medics inside and Freddy starting working on the President. The Major sat down in a little seat and wiped some sweat from her face. “Dear Lord.” She said. Then she looked over at Ash. He was sitting on the floor and had the President’s blood all over his hands and shirt. “I never properly introduced myself to you.” She said “I’m Lilly.” “I’m Ash.” Ash said looking over at here. “Aw man!” Ash said his eyes widening. “I forgot Charizard!”. Lilly looked out of a window in the chopper. She pointed out it and said “If that’s a Charizard then you don’t need to worry. Ash looked out the window too and sure enough Charizard was flying beside the helicopter. He rested against the cool metal of the helicopter’s wall. “You look tired.” Lilly said looking over at him. “I am.” Ash said closing his eyes. “Ugh. My head.”
A voice said from the other side of the chopper. The President had woken up. Ash ran over to his stretcher and got on his knees next to him. “What happened?” the President said his eyes closed. He looked like he was in pain. “You were shot.” Ash told him. “Ugh. That’s what I get for trying to go to the front lines.” He said.
Just then the chopper landed on the roof of a large hospital. Two doctors and the medics all got up and put the President on another stretcher. “He’s still got the bullet in him!” Lilly said “We need to get him into the O.R right now!”. “Right!” one of the doctors said. “Let’s go!”. As the doctors and medics wheeled the Ash climbed out of the chopper. He walked inside the hospital and leaned against a wall. So far since he got here he’d seen a President be shot, fought terrorists and felt like he was about to pass out right then and there. He needed some coffee.
 
Next chapter is here!

Chapter Five

Ash ran his fingers through his hair. He heard the elevator doors behind him open. He turned around and saw Lilly walking towards him. She had two cups of coffee in her hands. She handed him one and he took a sip. “So how’s the President?” he asked. “He’s in surgery. They’re almost done though.” She answered drinking her own coffee. “When do you think I’ll be able to talk to him?” Ash said walking over to a window and looking down at the ground below. They had to be about fifteen stories up. “A couple of hours. Maybe less.” She said walking over to the window too. “He’s tough. He used to be in the Marines.” Ash nodded his head and drank some more coffee. Lilly looked down and saw a wedding ring on Ash’s finger. “You’re married?” she asked. “Yeah. It’s been the best three years of my life.” Ash said looking down at his ring too. “Why didn’t she come with you?” Lilly asked. “She’s pregnant.” Ash answered. “Your first?” she asked. “Yep.” Ash said looking away from the window.
He finished his coffee and dropped it into a trash can as he walked to the elevator. Lilly followed him and said “What’s her name?”. They walked into the elevator and the doors closed. “Misty.” He answered. “Which floor is the O.R on?” he asked looking at the buttons. He’d been right. There were fifteen floors. “Thirteenth floor.” She said finishing her coffee too. The elevator moved down. “Is there a waiting room down there where we can wait for the President to get out of surgery?” “Of course.” Lilly said as the elevator doors opened onto the thirteenth floor. “I’ll show you.” She said walking ahead of him. He followed her down a hallway and then down another hallway. The she turned into a small waiting area. Ash sat down on a couch and leaned his head back. Apparently he fell asleep because next thing he knew Lilly was smacking him on the back of the head saying “Come on! The President is out of surgery and is ready for visitors.” Ash sat up and said “How long was I asleep?” “About an hour.” She said “God you’re a heavy sleeper.” Ash laughed and stood up. The two of them walked down a couple of hallways and then they saw a room with two men in black jackets flanking the door. Lilly walked up to them. They nodded and opened the door. The two of them walked inside and they saw the President sitting up in bed. He chest was wrapped in bandages. “How are you feeling?” Ash asked him. “Like crap.” He said turning his head to face him. “What happened? The last thing I remember was dragging the soldier up the beach.”
“Well you were hit when a terrorist sprayed the beach with machine gun fire.” Ash said. “Of course.” The President said. “Mr. President.” Ash said “Please call me Bill.” “Alright then Bill. Do you think I could get a chopper back to D.C? If that wormhole is still open then I should get back to my dimension and get those Pokeballs.” “I’m afraid that won’t be possible.” Said a soldier walking into the room. “What are you talking about?” Bill said looking over at the soldier. “D.C is being attacked by over one hundred disgruntled pokemon. There’s already been casualties on both sides.”
 
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Chapter Six

“What?!” Ash said. His eyes got wide and his jaw dropped. “I’ve got to get to D.C right now!”. “I’m sorry but,” The soldier started to say but Bill cut him off. “Get him a chopper back into D.C right now soldier. That’s an order.”. The soldier stood up straight and said “Yes sir!” he motioned for Ash to follow him and the two of them ran out of them room. The ran down the hall and got in the elevator. The soldier slammed his hand onto the “One” button. The elevator started going down. “We’re going to take my Humvee to a National Guard base twenty miles from here. There we’ll get a chopper and head into D.C.” the soldier said. “Right.” Ash said as the elevator doors opened. The two of them ran out of the hospital and into the parking lot. There was only one Humvee in the parking lot so Ash ran towards that one. The two of them jumped inside and the soldier started up the Humvee.
They shot off at sixty miles an hour and reached the base in no time. They leaped out and ran into the base. They got a pilot and ran out the base’s back door. There was a chopper sitting right there as though it was waiting for them. The three of them jumped into the chopper. As the chopper blades whirred into life Ash said “Wait! I don’t have a gun!”. The soldier pulled a pistol from inside his jacket and threw it to him. “Now you do!” he yelled over the choppers engines. The chopper flew through the air and it took them almost no time to get to D.C. Ash looked out the chopper’s window and saw the city. There were bangs and flashes of light coming from the city below. As they landed just outside the city gun shots mingled with the roars of pokemon. “Let’s go!” the soldier yelled and he ran forward into the chaos that was Washington D.C. Ash cocked his gun and ran into the city too. “Okay” he thought. “The wormhole was near the center of the city. If I’m going to get back up I need to get back there. But how am I going to get there?”. As he thought this he noticed a truck sitting half on the sidewalk and half on the street. It had no driver’s side door or windshield but the key was still in it so he jumped in and started it up. Thank God it had a full tank of gas. He drove it off the sidewalk and started heading towards the center of the city. He got a couple miles into the city but then a Cacturne walked right into the middle of the street! It fired a Pin Missile attack at him and it popped the front tires.
The truck skidded of the street into a stop sign. “D@%# it!” Ash said. He jumped out of the truck and yelled “Go Charizard!” and threw a Pokeball into the air. “Flamethrower! Now!” Ash yelled. Charizrd roared and shot flames at the Cacturne. They slammed into it and blasted it back into a Starbucks. Ash climbed onto Charizard’s back and it took off into the air. “Fly towards the center of the city!” Ash yelled to his Charizard. “Char!” it roared. Why hadn’t he thought of Charizard before? It was so much faster than that truck. Just then Charizard rolled almost all the way over as a Magical Leaf attack soared up at them. Ash looked down and saw two mobs of pokemon attacking each other. Hyper Beams flew from both sides and Pin Missiles exploded as they hit Flamethrowers. He had to get those Pokeballs. Just as he thought it he saw the wormhole below. “Charizard! Land!”. Charizard landed and Ash called it back into it’s Pokeball. He ran forward to the wormhole but when he was twenty yards away the wormhole started shrinking. Ash started running faster and faster. The wormhole grew smaller and smaller. Finally when he was three feet away he jumped at the wormhole. He soared through the air as the wormhole closed. He landed on hard pavement and felt a stabbing pain in his head. He reached up and felt blood dipped from the side of his head. He closed his eyes and blacked out.
 
lol Ash = owned.

Nice read, could work on the separation a bit more, otherwise good stuff.
 
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