Writing Ash&Dawn (PG-13)

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I made this fan-fic a long time ago. But, the staff got SO into it, they started posting to the story! (And Heavenly Spoon :F kept wanting to get Dawn pregnant...)

Anyway, here we go; Chapter 1!

It was an average morning in Kanto. Several Pidgey were chirping in the trees. It was several years since Dawn and Ash married. Dawn became the professor in Kanto. They had three kids, Mary, Brandon and May. Ash became the Gym Leader in Viridian City. Sometimes, Dawn and Ash do tag Gym Battles

Pallet Town had grown into a nice little city, and is still the site of Prof. Oak's Lab

Everyone sat at the table when Ash made an announcement
"Kids, we're all going on vacation !" Ash said
"Wow! Where?" the kids replied
"To Mt. Coronet!" Ash replied
"Uh, Ash. Mt. Coronet doesn't have any snow" Dawn stated
"Okay, we're going to Mt. Snow!" Ash replied. They piled all their snow equipment into the minivan and drove off to Mt. Snow (the place doesn't exist, so don't ask)

Dawn parked the van in the parking lot and they walked into the lodge
"Hello, how long will you be staying?" the attendant said
"Just a day, nothing more, nothing less" Ash replied
"Okay, then just sign here" the attendant replied. Ash signed them in and they were given a key to their room
"Oh, its beautiful!" Dawn said
"It's got a beautiful view of the mountain, too!" Ash replied. They got into their snow equipment and skied to the chairlifts
"Uh, on second thought, I might as well stay back in the lodge" Dawn replied
"But, Dawn. This is a day for the family!" Ash moaned
"And I'd like to go with you, but I told you, I'm scared of heights!" Dawn replied. Dawn skied back to the lodge

After skiing for a while, Ash and the kids walked into the lodge. Dawn was sitting in a chair, sipping hot cocoa when Ash walked up
"Hi, honey, feeling any better?" Ash replied
"Yes, in fact, I might as well ski for a little bit. Come on!" Dawn said, energetically. The chairlift let off Ash and Dawn on a steep incline. Dawn looked down nervously as Ash was trying to talk to her
"Now, if you need to fall, just fall down. Okay?" Ash said
"Okay" Dawn replied and they skied down the mountainside. Halfway through, Dawn's ski tripped over something and she tumbled down the mountainside before stopping some 10 flips later
"Dawn, honey! Are you all right?" Ash shouted
"No, I think I felt something break!" Dawn shouted. An ambulance zoomed Dawn to the hospital, with Ash and the kids in toe

"I'm afraid Dawn broke both her leg and her arm. She'll have to be in a wheelchair for several weeks" the doctor said
"Oh, that's super!" Dawn shouted
"Dawn, I know you aren't happy, but if you need any help, I'll be there" Ash said, lifting Dawn into bed and piling up pillows to support her knee and her arm, "If you need me, just ring this bell and I'll run up here"
"Okay" Dawn replied

Several weeks later...
"I have good news; we can take off your casts, Mrs. Ketchum" the doctor said
"Oh, that's good to hear!" Dawn replied
"You're first few movements with your leg and arm will be stiff, but the stiffness will go away" the doctor explained. Dawn slowly wobbled to the van and Ash drove home

END Chapter 1

(This is a PEARLSHIPPING fic! If you don't like like it, tough)
 
No offense, but I can't really see Dawn as a professor.
And technically, My. Coronet does have snow at it's peak, though I suppose Mt. snow has a lot more..(hence it's name) :p

"Oh, that's super!" Dawn shouted
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You might want to think of adding "sarcastically" after that sentence. I actuallly thought Dawn was overjoyed after breaking her leg and her arm. :D
I'm not really into "shipping" stuff, but so far, I like your story. Keep up the good work. ;)
 
"Dawn's ski tripped over something and she tumbled down the mountainside before stopping some 10 flips later"

loooooooooooool. I just found this funny for some reason.

Long time no see. I thought we'd scared you off! D:
 
Here's Chapter 2, so I don't have to do it tommorow...:D

Dawn walked into the kitchen, holding the mail
"Anything good?' Ash questioned
"Just a bunch of bills" Dawn replied. Dawn threw the stack of letters on the table and Ash sifted through them
"Here, it's a letter to you. And it isn't a bill" Ash said (Dawn pays all the bills, just so you know)
"It's a letter from Kenny" Dawn replied
"Kenny?" Ash questioned
"You know Kenny. The kid who called me "Dee-Dee all the time" Dawn replied
"Oh" Ash said
"It says he wants to meet us for lunch at a fabulous restaurant in Celadon City!" Dawn stated
"Ugh, you know I hate people stepping into our marriage" Ash said
"Ash, you're treating me like I'm your daughter. I'm your wife. Treat me as such" Dawn replied
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"So, Dawn as taken my plot" Kenny said, "I've been thinking about her--for 20 years!" Kenny shouts. Kenny's bedroom is adorned with stuff about Dawn
"Now, when we meet Kenny, don't try to kill him" Dawn said
"Whatever" Ash replied. Dawn parked the car into the parking lot and Kenny was waiting there
"Ah, Dawn. You're looking as beautiful as ever" Kenny said, kissing Dawn's hand. Ash runs up and punches Kenny
"That's what you get for kissing my wife!" Ash shouted
"WIFE!? You mean you're married, Dawn?" Kenny shouted
"Well, Ash was there for me, and we ended up marrying. Is that a problem?" Dawn said calmly
"No, not at all" Kenny replied. But, Kenny was cursing inside his mind and began plotting to kill Ash
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"Dear, I think Kenny wants to kill ME" Ash said
"Oh, don't be so worried!" Dawn said
"But, I" Ash cut himself off
"Well, if he will, we're leaving!" Dawn replied grabbing Ash's hand
"I'm back from the bath-" Kenny got cut off. Dawn had Ash had left. Kenny became steamed; "NO!" he shouted
"Thank heavens we got away!" Dawn sighed
"Thanks a lot, honey. You saved my life" Ash replied
"It doesn't matter, as long as Kenny didn't kill you. I'm happy" Dawn replied
END Chapter 2
 
Here we go! Chapter 3!

"You should know what day it is, Ash" Dawn said
"Why, I would remember that today is our anniversary" Ash replied
"Now kids, we're going out for our anniversary, be good for your Uncle Joe while we're gone!" Dawn said
"But, mom!" Will yelled
"We can't leave you alone! No babysitter will want to baby sit you guys. I don't want to hear horror stories from your Uncle Joe!" Dawn replied
"Be good, we'll see you in a couple of hours!" Ash said closing the door
Dawn and Ash went to a fancy Viridian City restaurant. Dawn sat, worried about leaving an old man like her Uncle Joe with a couple of out-of-control kids.
"What's wrong dear?" Ash questioned
"I'm just worried that the kids are plotting to do something to Uncle Joe" Dawn replied
"Oh come, even YOU hate your Uncle Joe!" Ash replied
"That's true" Dawn replied
"Well, let's go home and check on them" Ash replied. They paid the bill and walked out the door when a robber came up and stole Dawn's purse
"Ah! My purse! Ash, please do something!" Dawn yelled
"Right!" Ash and Dawn chased after the robber. The robber hit a dead end and threw out two Pokeballs, one a Fearow and the other one, a Crobat
"Ready Dawn?" Ash questioned
"Yes, Ash!" Dawn replied.
"Pikachu!" Ash shouted
"And Sparky!" Dawn chimed in
"Double Thunder!" they both ordered. The two Thunder attacks hit the robber's Fearow and Crobat sending them flying into the robber. Thus, sending Dawn's purse flying into the air. Dawn catches it just as the police arrive
"Thank you so much you arrived at the time you did!" Dawn said relieved
"No, thank you. You helped us throw another criminal behind bars!" the police chief replied. Dawn and Ash drove home to Pallet Town
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Dawn and Ash walk in to the house to see Brandon hold a slingshot to Uncle Joe's neck
"Kids! What are you doing!?" Dawn hollered
"We're definitely not trying to kill Uncle Joe with a slingshot, if that's what you're thinking" Brandon replied
"Upstairs" Dawn replied
"But" Brandon said
"NOW!" Dawn yelled at the top of her voice. Mary, Will and Brandon walked up the steps to their rooms
"I'm sorry Uncle Joe that they tried to kill you" Dawn said calmly
"Oh, now Dawn. Those kids made me feel alive again. I'll baby sit your kids anytime you two go out, whatever the occasion may be" Uncle Joe replied.
”Well, what are we going to do about the kids?" Ash questioned
"I'm not sure, but tomorrow, they're going to wake up to another world!" Dawn replied
END Chapter 3
 
Great I cant wait for chapter 4!Can I help?What happened to Ash's Staravia,Chimchar,and Turtwig?And Dawn's other pokemon?
 
Ok Can I help with the story and will Ash ever get them back?When will chapter 4 be here?
 
Here's Chapter 4

"I don't see what's wrong with this car!" Dawn said
"This car is old, time to get a new one!" Ash replied
"Welcome to the Pallet Town New car Dealership!" the owner replied, smiling
"Yes, we're here to buy a new car" Ash replied
"Oh right this way!" the owner said, showing them a brand new car. It was bright pink with white stripes along the side
"Dear, this is my car!" Dawn shouted, running towards it
"Well this is the Passport, a rugged car with 4-wheel drive, AC, Moon/Sunroof, and computer navigation!" the owner stated
"Sold! How much?" Dawn said, ecstatically
"15,000 dollars" the owner replied (In this story, Pokemon adopted the American style of currency)
"Ouch, do you take a check?" Dawn replied. She wrote out the check and drove off
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"Mom, can we go for a ride?" Will pleaded
"Okay, we need to go to the grocery store" Dawn replied
"I could never fit 10 bags of groceries into the car before!" Dawn said, proudly. They reach a congested section of highway.
"Mom, just use the field!" Will said
"All right" Dawn replied, cutting into the field. A couple of days later, Dawn tried the same stunt, only the police catch her
"Oh great!" Dawn yelled
"I'm afraid we're going revoke your license" the police officer said
"What? You can’t!" Dawn whined
"I'm afraid we have to" the police officer said
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Ash and the kids went to the Viridian City Zoo
"Dad, it says do not disturb the Dodrio" Will said
"Pah! Do you realize rules are set up just to annoy you?" Ash replied, kicking open the Dodrio cage, thus causing the Dodrio to go on a pecking rampage. The police officer who revoked Dawn's license came to the door
"We really need you to help out at the Zoo" the police officer said
"I'd love to, but it appears my license was revoked, you say I'm a hazard to the road" Dawn replied
"(chuckling) Look I'm sorry, we really need a car like yours" the police officer said
"The answer is no, now goodbye!" Dawn replied, closing the door
"We're live from Viridian City Zoo where wild Dodrio are on a rampage. Everyone escaped except these three innocent visitors" the announcer said. It showed the Dodrio circling around Ash, Will and Mary
"I'm coming, dear!" Dawn replied, running into her car. She drove to the Dodrio circling around Ash. She used her car to drive the Dodrio back into their cage, where the zoo official locked them up
"Dear you saved us!" Ash said
"Well, it's just wanted to help" Dawn replied
"Mrs. Ketchum, I was wrong to revoke your license, so here you go" the police officer said
"Thanks, I got my license back!" Dawn replied. And they drove off into the sunset
END Chapter 4
 
"Dad, it says do not disturb the Dodrio" Will said
"Pah! Do you realize rules are set up just to annoy you?" Ash replied

Funny!
 
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